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RAGGED TIME MELODY (Lyric) by Joshua_Tree I have misplaced the words.
I know that they are here -
Somewhere,
Lying near the laundry,
On the floor.
I have mislain the tune.
It is floating in the air -
Up there,
Fluttering out a window
Left ajar.
I chase after the beat.
It is underneath my feet -
Down there,
Rolling out the door
And down the street.
I know not what to do
With this song I wrote for you.
You see,
It is broken like my heart
Used to be.
Up the ladder:
Walking
Down the ladder:
The Perfect Night
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Posted: June 28, 2005 7:24 AM PDT; Last modified: June 28, 2005 9:10 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8410625 Overall Rank: 10713 Comments:
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Joshua_Tree @ 68.230.105.101
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28-Jun-05/7:27 AM
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Thank you Zodiac, others, for your comments before. The exchange turned out to be a fruitful one for me. I hope that feeling is mutual.
A song with bad words, tune, and beat is a bad song. Let's hope you're singing a good song about a bad song.
This is about a love song written for a previous lover that a man on the rebound is trying to pass off as being written for his new love. What follows from this 'white' lie is a string of awkward justifications that finally lead him to something approaching a real revelation about his emotions. Even though he never is truly candid about the song, some truth comes out of it.
It's a rebound relationship, so it probably won't last anyway, but the experience highlights some things with which he need to deal before he is ready to consider a more serious relationship. Dirty laundry laying about should be an obvious image; I am hoping that clues the reader into the fact that the open window and door are more than they appear. 183 view(s)
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