Re: Last Night by Roisin	Dovina 12.72.11.31	27-May-05/5:02 PM
This is really good. I'm with you all the way. The start of verse 3 is weak.
Re: a comment on Aimee by LintyWeenis	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/5:02 PM
'wish you'd done more with it' is an euphemism for 'what the hell she's talking about'. If the first two words are deleted, comma's will be needed in mid-sentence.
Re: Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Dovina 12.72.11.31	27-May-05/4:59 PM
I feel really sad you got no response on this other than mine. I have an ace response in mind, waiting for time and inclination.
Re: Aimee by LintyWeenis	Dovina 12.72.11.31	27-May-05/4:56 PM
Title is great; wish you'd done more with it. Leave out "It is".
Re: Utensils of creation by Damien	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/4:55 PM
Yes, this is how a politician would do a poem. With hollow words, but lots of them.
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	Hallmark 129.12.235.73	27-May-05/4:40 PM
Anyway, grammar has everything to do with writing what you feel. For another example, you don't even know what you think and communicate like a fucking cerebral-palsied, you fucking moron Class! Of course it was!
Re: a comment on Parrallelogram Perry Como by Crakyamuni	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/3:08 PM
I'll remember this quite nasty LSD trip for the rolled up feet.
Re: a comment on Nesting Instinct of Women by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	27-May-05/12:44 PM
In the several days you’ve been wandering in the wilderness, as the scorched desert used to be called, like some 40-day fast, I’ve missed these convoluted questions, worded not so much to draw answers as to aggravate some angst. 1) Let -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. answer. 2) Anybody can interpret anything he/she wants. If I want to liken the crap-filled raven in someone’s poem to a preacher and take off with it, I shall.
Re: a comment on Mid Years by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	27-May-05/12:23 PM
I am happy for you.
Re: a comment on To Making Do by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	27-May-05/12:18 PM
Right
Re: a comment on Swoon by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.185	27-May-05/12:13 PM
Blush!
Re: yet another what if poem by shadows	Crakyamuni 131.252.231.192	27-May-05/10:57 AM
5 five thats it
Re: yet another what if poem by shadows	Crakyamuni 131.252.231.192	27-May-05/10:56 AM
I'm still laughing about the name lintyweenis! ok ok sorry. Happiness is a warm something. thats it.
Re: Parrallelogram Perry Como by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.231.192	27-May-05/10:54 AM
It's Summer time love.
Re: yet another what if poem by shadows	LintyWeenis 152.163.100.135	27-May-05/10:03 AM
What if, indeed.
Re: Lower than low by nicole081083	LintyWeenis 152.163.100.135	27-May-05/9:15 AM
Well, can't say I was ever a fan of the whole "let's right a song about Jesus" thing, but I guess I can't down you for that alone.
Re: Last Night by Roisin	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/7:43 AM
<< All the pain only relative, An evaporation from the mind condenses on her body. ... To her closed cycle of hurt >> That 6th line is a true gem. But I feel there is a contradiction between the 5th and the last line. Care to explain, Roisin?
Re: Now I'm with you by Roisin	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/7:24 AM
The most minimalist poem in the world. (except for the one that goes 'I am'). Excellent.
Re: Lower than low by nicole081083	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/6:43 AM
The awful thing is, this is such a pile of platitudes that I simply do not believe you are converted. There is absolutely no spark of true believe. What I see here is a brainwashed person.
Re: In the aspens by sliver	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	27-May-05/6:37 AM
You can mock mother nature all you want, but you will never be able to filter out a certain sense of wonder. The poem would have been great (after changes according to Dovina's advices) if it had contained both feelings. It's in the last two lines perhaps, but not powerful enough.