Re: Travails of one decade by Prince of Void	Jessina 61.1.237.31	24-Dec-07/12:38 AM
A nice poem with difference.
Re: a comment on Little Robin by Jessina	Jessina 61.1.236.83	23-Dec-07/8:14 PM
Thanks a lot for all your postive comments.Merry xmas to you.
Re: Shiver by Skamper	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:12 AM
Oh gross! Swap existances competing, drop the hyphen, swap fingers driven. I think you could lose lines 13 and 14 and do no harm. Gross. I love it.
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:03 AM
I wouldn't have gotten that but that's my ignorance about Plath.
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:00 AM
I don't know what you're doing. I just know it's working.
Re: Sight Reading by Christof	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/10:53 AM
If I could find fault with this, I'd be a professor. That's a compliment, Sir.
Re: Addendum to Engine Braking BY INTRANSIT by sliver	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/10:45 AM
Been busy lately, couldn't get round to the ranker. Obviously not the way I was going, (though I did miss my mark ) there's potential here. Drop- Then the, as the, hot brakes, until, a sign, fuck it. condense the jake line and the following line. Make jake a capital OR a corporation.
Re: Little Robin by Jessina	Prince of Void 77.237.66.60	23-Dec-07/10:26 AM
A nice poem ...
Re: a comment on The Least of These by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.120.169	21-Dec-07/9:38 PM
Line 2 ends with an implied pause, at least I want it to. This leads to the new phrase in Line 3. I can see how you thought they should be part of the same thought, but they’re not. I want the controversy that this poem courts. Thanks for noticing. It’s a harsh Christmas theme, designed to antagonize. Thanks for commenting.
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	Ranger 86.140.67.149	21-Dec-07/3:02 PM
Aside from the punctuation not scanning well at the start (it's the hyphen that threw me) this is excellent.
Re: The Least of These by Dovina	Ranger 86.140.67.149	21-Dec-07/2:59 PM
Love the last stanza, and bits here and there also appeal. Stanzas one and two are nice but could be reworded to be a bit more, well, poetic. The sickly kids section is also promising, but I don't really like the word 'kids' in poetry. And I hate seeing life rhymed with strife. It's only a flying visit I've paid, but I have read this a couple of times since it was posted. Hope the Christmas season's treating you well!
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	Dovina 208.127.120.77	21-Dec-07/11:17 AM
a sad tale well told.
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	Dovina 208.127.120.77	21-Dec-07/11:13 AM
The Christmas timing makes me wonder and chuckle. But I think it's tender and not Christmasey, but affectionate and giving. At least that's my take on it.
Re: a comment on The Least of These by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.120.77	21-Dec-07/11:09 AM
It seems my Pakistani kids struck an unwelcome note for both you and Caducus. I guess we get so many appeals this time of year that this one seems trite. Still, the words of this baby in the hay also seem trite in all their familiarity—give your tunic to the robber why just stole your cloak, and turn the other cheek, do good to those who hate you, etc. Just sounds counterproductive. Maybe it’s not, and maybe those Pakistani kids who want us dead are better won than shot. Thanks for your thoughts.
Re: Go Ahead by makelovenotwar	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:36 AM
As appealing as britneys hole.
Re: Broken by makelovenotwar	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:34 AM
Is this a joke?
Re: This Poetry Thing by LynnJR	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:34 AM
bang.
Re: Nine by MacFrantic	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:33 AM
Goes on a bit but how it all connects stanza to stanza plus the fact that it engaged me has to be thumbs up and not two fingers. Reads well.
Re: Portsmouth Belle 5 by Garrett S Sexton	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:31 AM
Weird, Chauceresque.
Re: I'm in love by nicole081083	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:25 AM
Very generic and exclusive for two. It totally lacks originality and rhyming does not validate it as a poem.