Dovina
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
16 Jul 2005, 7:16 AM
The world wobbles on its axis due to precession the same as a gyroscope does.
Look up "uniformitarianism" or "principle of uniformity" before you say it doesn't exist. Stuff happens as it has happened - that's the gist of it.
Your third paragraph is hogwash! Uniformity is not negative, as you yourself have implied in DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY.
Para 4: Uniformitarians will agree with you. Theists might wonder if God has a hand in it.
DISCUSSION TOPIC FOR THE DAY: Who or what made the laws of physics? I'd answer yours, but it's one of those what-if questions that's, as you say, is moot.
Smll package. Don't they seem trivial after awhile? Movin' on is what it's about. Good.
Talk about a rut! And pretty well told.
I'll put stsnza's next time.
thank you bandgeek.
haahhaa. what the hell?
The ending lines were like rapid fire- but climatically worthy. Were you disregarding where the line breaks fell? It seems like this would be more poignant if one didn't have to scroll around to read the lines, and if the line breaks were placed strategically.
I agree with jessicazee, you talked about a kind of pain, but I couldn't really empathize- even though I imagine it is real, in some respect, for you/your narrator.
I didn't see the happy ending coming.
I stay awake at night thinking about whey too, when I am not thinking of bulgar or tempeh or grape tomatoes or heartbreak.
nice collage of details
funny, you should do public health commercials
RE #7: How many ant hills can fit on a mountain? I've seen ant hills on mountains. How many ant hills are in sand dunes?
A mountain could be less Aunty, though.
I think she's misled, but happy, so why does it matter?
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
C.O.D. a term used by the Post Office some years ago. It was a service (Cash On Delivery) where no mailing or shipping costs were paid until the pkg reached it's destination. Who ever recieved the pkg paid all costs immediately upon delivery.
Definitely shows my age knowing that stuff!
I liked this one.
Except, for being an ignorant 15yroldbrat, what's C.O.D.?
bullshit
Tell me why the clouds are "sensuous" without the word "fluffy" (which conjures kittens and toilet tissue). Maybe this is a free-form ode to a friend, or you read my brother's 1985 diary when he had a Charlene Tilton obsession? Either way, I want to meet her. She sounds awesome.
The sentiment deserves more. And Kansas deserves credit for your "dust in the wind." However, I think your form and rhythm are smart. For whatever you take my opinion for.
I am thinking you are young...keep writing, this is sweet and a look into young-ness. I give you credit for correct spelling...not one mistake! (which is more than I can say about a lot of people who post! (Other than> 'outwith'...but I figured a typo!) You got too wordy in places> 'before in my fears I drown.'& 'I, which you will ban'. My advise is to write as you speak, as you hear it said in your head...let it just flow as-is, then clean it up and work on anything that doesn't work.
Sorry...I wonder WHY you posted this without a simple edit job...man...spelling, periods wherever, and not an original thought in there...boring, and not saying much.