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Free verse № 128512

Happy Charlene

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Jul 2005 · 11 comments

Sensuous fluffy clouds wrap the earth in soft embrace where birds sing for joy and all things produce good The earth is a white padded room where all injustice falls before her And any gloom will soon aright She loves it so— a world devoid of hope for good is already accomplished beautiful and purely white

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11 comments

[6] darby pyn 11-Jul-05/3:53 PM Reply
nice positive emotions.
a good read.
[4] Lenore › darby pyn 11-Jul-05/7:35 PM Reply
Read it again. It isn’t positive. It’s depressing as all hell.
[n/a] Dovina › Lenore 11-Jul-05/7:40 PM Reply
Thanks for clearing that up.
[6] darby pyn › Dovina 11-Jul-05/7:46 PM Reply
What's it about.
since I got it wrong.
[n/a] Dovina › darby pyn 11-Jul-05/7:50 PM Reply
Maybe there is a world where all is wonderful. She sees this world that way, and to her, it is.
[6] darby pyn › Dovina 11-Jul-05/7:57 PM Reply
interesting. I missed it. now reading it
back I don't know what I saw.
I still like it.
[n/a] Dovina › darby pyn 11-Jul-05/7:58 PM Reply
no prob, I do that half the time.
[8] edpeterson 11-Jul-05/5:52 PM Reply
After reading the first line, I though 'ugh'. Not a good start, almost made me run.

I am glad I didn't because the rest is clever and serrated. I wanna be sedated.
[n/a] Dovina › edpeterson 12-Jul-05/10:17 AM Reply
I don’t how it’s serrated, but sedated – alright. That’s what booze and drugs are about, and mind trips like Charlene’s.
[7] jessicazee 13-Jul-05/11:11 PM Reply
Tell me why the clouds are "sensuous" without the word "fluffy" (which conjures kittens and toilet tissue). Maybe this is a free-form ode to a friend, or you read my brother's 1985 diary when he had a Charlene Tilton obsession? Either way, I want to meet her. She sounds awesome.
[n/a] Dovina › jessicazee 14-Jul-05/5:11 PM Reply
I think she's misled, but happy, so why does it matter?