Re: a comment on Stardust by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.216.76	8-Sep-05/2:34 PM
It would be a lot more helpful if you just repost the comment. Thanks.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/1:15 PM
Alright, I'll be there.
Re: keys by ay deee	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/1:10 PM
Oooo! Oooo! You're a janitor! I love this game...
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/1:08 PM
I'll be in Memphis..I try to stay away from Dyersburg as much as possible...but hey, stay away from Chequers...that place is crusty in the worst way.
Re: a comment on Rejuvenation by Dovina	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/1:06 PM
Become a daffodil. Forget about the human race. Right now I'm about to polish my yellow steel petals and go peppily out for some leisurely shopping snd dinner. You might find me later this evening at a bar in Dyersburg, Tn.
Re: Stardust by TLRufener	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/1:03 PM
And for a second I thought it was Willie..but alas, no. There's just nothing original here...please see my comment on...umm, one of the poems by Heather Dee as it applies here as well.
Re: God-Damn Love by D. $ Fontera	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:54 PM
How is it that you can write something good ("Falling") and then post this foolishness. The Drive-By Truckers' "God Damn Lonely Love" is much better...check that out.
Re: modern death(Debuffeted) by Crakyamuni	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:50 PM
mm...I liked the last line better before...
Re: Rejuvenation by Dovina	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:49 PM
I like the way this flows and the sounds of it, but it's just a little peppy for me (I'm in a state of disillusionment with the human race at the moment), sooooooooo....I don't know...thats just how I feel, and as many of the whipper snappers posting on this site will tell you, feelings are the only thing that matters.
Re: A Portrait of Antonio Machado (Edit) by Sasha	Crakyamuni 131.252.230.15	8-Sep-05/12:46 PM
I enjoyed this gesture of the traditional. You made me want to bust out my rosary.
Re: Beneath The Undertow by longships	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:43 PM
I don't think undertow is the word you're looking for here...I don't think one could be under the undertow..maybe try something else..I don't know what, just something else....wake maybe... Otherwise, not too bad.
Re: Rambling by terbenaw	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/12:40 PM
To answer your opening question, I can. Even the Apostle Paul could (Romans 7) Could omit "My personality is" in verse 2.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:38 PM
also, The Scout is not a person and virgin is used a little loosely here. Just meaning not completely and utterly fucked.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:37 PM
I am such a bastard.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:36 PM
sorry
Re: a comment on modern death(Debuffeted) by Crakyamuni	wilco 66.61.101.130	8-Sep-05/12:35 PM
I think it did affect us all...and I'm hesitant to say, but I think its true....on a much larger scale than even 9/11. This is a better edit, although I did notice that in the last line, you got simgs instead of sings. Also, I'd love a little punctuation (a little pet peeve of mine). Incidentally, The Scout seemed to strike people funny...I don't think most people really put any thought into it, as most thought that the Scout in the poem was a person...it wasn't. It can probably be interpreted in several ways, but the basic premise is that we fucked up. Be it in the fact that New Orleans was built below sea level, the fact that the levees weren't made like they should've been, that people just went completely apeshit minutes after the hurricane was over or any other number of things....the whole thing is..we fucked up as people. BTW, none of us know anything of poems...if we did, we would be published and doing this for a living instead of posting on the Ranker.
Re: modern death(Debuffeted) by Crakyamuni	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/12:34 PM
"sings" in the last line. "gray" unless you're British. A terrible poem, which doesn't mean it's not good. It's just terrible.
Re: Internet Junkie by cuddlytiger17	Crakyamuni 131.252.230.15	8-Sep-05/12:33 PM
The last four lines ring of something beyond the screen, I like that, links, ties, bonds, slavery! Not in a kinked out way, but deeper. Cudos lady.
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/12:05 PM
I asked you if you really do not see the point of the poem. You answered “yes” you do not see the point, but added that you realize it’s a metaphor. You rambled about the reality of sunrises. I said your point was trite. That’s all it’s about as far as I can see.
Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina	Dovina 69.92.13.105	8-Sep-05/11:57 AM
How so?