tianyi
on nicholson by ay deee
19 Sep 2005, 1:08 PM
right on
Looking at shapes in the clouds is most commonly thought of as a childs' past-time. I switched to rhyme at the half-way mark because I wanted to show the adult reverting to a child. The ending is the child reverting back to the adult, realizing that there are things that must be done before a vacation is due.
Getting better.
Meter problems in stanza 2.
You're lying not laying.
I also think your lying the other way too.
Why shift into rhyme half way through.
But when will your name be poet?
They say once you go panda you might loose a handa.
Brilliant!
Your grasp of ebonics astounds me.
Please don't tell me it was the old Andrew Jackson school.
Sorry. Cheap shot.
But did you know the North won.
PA (where I'm from) is called the Kentucky of the north.
I also hear NC is the South Carolina of the north.
I guess you have.
Wait a minute!
You've seen wilco's dick?
Certainly there's some sense of structural design in the dams.
I'm just saying maybe George Carlin is right. Maybe our major purpose for being on earth is to make plastic. Because the earth couldn't do it on its own. Doesn't that still make us part of the natural process. Just a bunch of eager beavers cutting down trees, building dams, trying to control the earth.
he must have lost interest, dude...
cutting a rug so thick:
like dancing i'm dancing up such a storm
that my legs disappear into the rug
so i can't see my pants
glad you enjoyed
liked it. maybe someday i'll visit as well, heck, maybe even move there -8-
You're kidding! Sweet...
I don't know, I've already written it, and can send you an electronic version,
but I might change publishers, we'll see.
Reindeer?
You know, you can't just paste a bunch of cliches together and call it a poem. This should constitute as plagiarism. I'll give you a "1" because you spelled everything right.