Re: Count the Days by longships	zodiac 217.144.7.195	23-Oct-05/5:04 AM
Yeah, and I've got news for you: being a poet doesn't get you laid like it used to, when Wordsworth and Coleridge could get non-scaggy college girls whenever they wanted without waiting or foreplay.
Re: In my palm by Prince of Void	zodiac 217.144.7.195	23-Oct-05/5:02 AM
You're probably too young to know that for one glorious summer the name on everyone's lips was Evan Dando.
Re: Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	Tintagiles 207.179.148.78	22-Oct-05/7:22 PM
But fuller, un-sucked-in stomachs make better drums!
Re: How often? by little_big_nose	Tintagiles 207.179.148.78	22-Oct-05/7:20 PM
'And how often do we separate our masters from the leash' -- what?
Re: The Marble Me by PsydewaysTears	Tintagiles 207.179.148.78	22-Oct-05/7:16 PM
The first two lines aren't bad. The rest...
Re: Leg by jessicazee	Tintagiles 207.179.148.78	22-Oct-05/7:14 PM
Not that I necessarily disagree with the poem (especially since I've never seen your legs), but whether or not a hairy female leg is nice or not depends on the shape of the leg. As a rule, hairy ones will be just as nice when shaved, though the reverse is not necessarily true.
Re: a comment on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	22-Oct-05/12:03 PM
I would prefer a farsighted, who would see me clearly while distant (and thusly diminished by perspective) but not have a chance of seeing anything closer. Admittedly nearsighted is better as a metaphor. Do you think that's why so many people use it as a metaphor? Well, everybody has keys.
Re: A LOVER’S TORMENT by anushree	Dovina 17.255.240.138	22-Oct-05/11:22 AM
amost of the rhymes seem forced. Still it's a good sentiment.
Re: LIFELINE by outofdarkness138	Dovina 17.255.240.138	22-Oct-05/11:20 AM
When a dying person realizes the futility and knows the person he's crying out to wants to help but there's nothing she can do, then you are near the end. Well said, if that's what you mean. Leave out "thee" though.
Re: A SURREAL DEPREDATION! by anushree	Dovina 17.255.240.138	22-Oct-05/11:14 AM
The ...... is only distracting. Typo in line 6. Some good lines here, but what are you saying?
Re: a comment on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	22-Oct-05/11:00 AM
A match for me? A nearsighted man? Sold!
Re: a comment on Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	Dovina 17.255.240.138	22-Oct-05/10:58 AM
A severely nearsighted man will not even notice if I am fat (which I am not), he will see only my eyes and anything else he gets close to. But I meant it more metaphorically, as seeing my character. I admit it's like a string of maxims, and a bit didactic. Do you see a market in the keychain business?
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	zodiac 217.144.7.195	22-Oct-05/9:58 AM
Meaning or not, it's a sexy as hell thing to say. I've found myself repeating tongue-in-groove all week to random Arabs. Proof that submitting to the will of micromanaging Allah didn't get them all brains.
Re: Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	22-Oct-05/9:34 AM
A nearsighted man will see you clearly if you are close, and fuzzily from a distance. Are you sure that's what you meant? That aside, rather too like one of those women's-keychain jokes like, Have you ever noticed all of women's problems start with 'Men'?
Re: a comment on Marriage by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	22-Oct-05/9:25 AM
Last I checked, I wasn't mocking your existing, functional relationship.
Re: Slim and Pretty, Or Not by Dovina	INTRANSIT 12.36.196.2	21-Oct-05/2:03 PM
*TWIST* there's a match for you. Thank got for rubenesquenesses. es.
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	<~> 167.206.181.179	21-Oct-05/2:03 PM
you pronounce it ~ the brackets are silent.
Re: Leg by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 12.36.196.2	21-Oct-05/2:01 PM
What? No vvvvipvvvvvipvvvvvvvip of corduroy?
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 12.36.196.2	21-Oct-05/1:58 PM
Both are incorrect. I was thinking that the things we say -tongue in groove- have no meaning. We are word butchers. Not in the poetic sense, of course. More like, the thing itself and not about the thing. I don't know. How do you pronounce your moniker anyway? Is it <~>? or do you pronounce it <~>? I just wanna know.
Re: a comment on Farm animals by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 12.36.196.2	21-Oct-05/1:51 PM
And it is enjambed, as well. The poetry of Rumi i have has been translated by Coleman Barks. Is there another translation that is better? Or am I just missing the lyricism as well as my butcher block is missing a leg?