CommentsComments 13921–13940 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

zodiac replying on One Second by TLRufener 27 Nov 2005, 5:44 AM
I often agree with you, or at least grant you certain points, while you never agree with me. I'm sure by your logic this means you're winning.
zodiac replying on Due Consideration by Dovina 27 Nov 2005, 5:41 AM
I'd like to see Dovina's Reason cast as sexy protagonist woman and Dovina's Emotion cast as the prude seductee. They end up in a flat in Brooklyn with 2.5 kids and a Hyundai. Nights when Reason's out of town, Emotion still likes to dress in women's clothes and pretend to be "Douvinae", sexy damsel of wildly romantic melodrama.
zodiac replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 27 Nov 2005, 5:36 AM
Relating the two what? Sometimes, I truly believe you're not trying to make sense. Judges' ruling: Colossally stupid.
wilco on Low by wilco 26 Nov 2005, 10:08 PM
Just for the record, I absolutely fucking hate this...it's cheezy and cliche...there are a few things I like about it, though..it's something of an experiment.
wilco replying on The Mask by TLRufener 26 Nov 2005, 8:32 PM
yep
wilco replying on Colorbars by wilco 26 Nov 2005, 8:28 PM
Well, you've confused me...is it good or is it bad? lol
Dovina on Colorbars by wilco 26 Nov 2005, 8:27 PM
"grey that’s been wearing down his soul" is good. No it's bad. Same for "kiss from old scars and lullabies."
Dovina replying on listen by elderking 26 Nov 2005, 8:22 PM
Okay, I'll take that little pipi trip I've been planning for the last hour.
Dovina replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 26 Nov 2005, 8:19 PM
Colossal stupidity is one of those inane terms only someone desperate for a sleeping partner would think of and demonstrate by relating the two.
Dovina replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 26 Nov 2005, 8:18 PM
You really wouldn't want to know what women are thinking, you'd be disgusted. It's the way dogs and cats coexist, except for that elusive bond.
Dovina replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 26 Nov 2005, 8:15 PM
Sorry, I save that sort for you know who. Besides, this started with my appeal for more femininity in the workplace.
Bill Z Bub on The Angry Bush by wilco 26 Nov 2005, 3:06 PM
If I could impeach an angry bush... Love it. 10 for the politics alone.
Bill Z Bub on i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee 26 Nov 2005, 2:43 PM
The third line had me confused, until I finally realized on the fourth read that you meant "an old one-speed". Violent dreams. Guns never appear in my dreams. Instead, people point their fingers and say BANG. Then the bad thing falls over.
elderking replying on listen by elderking 26 Nov 2005, 1:53 PM
True enough! Thanks.
elderking replying on listen by elderking 26 Nov 2005, 1:52 PM
Thanks!
elderking replying on listen by elderking 26 Nov 2005, 1:51 PM
I figured if I was wordy enough, he might "hear" what I was saying. I figured out after awhile he was pretty much "deaf". Thanks for the comment.
ALChemy replying on listen by elderking 26 Nov 2005, 11:14 AM
You go girl.
ALChemy on The Mask by TLRufener 26 Nov 2005, 11:12 AM
Did you notice every line in your poem is written as a seperate sentence. Caps at the beginning. MS Word? You need to get personal. Say things that are unique to your situation or perspective. We have no idea who the hell you're talking to. A lover? A friend? A man? A woman? Michael Jackson? Who? Don't try to write a poem for everyone. If you do it will always turn out the same way. Hokey.
ALChemy replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 26 Nov 2005, 10:32 AM
You really wouldn't want to know what men are thinking. You'd be disgusted.
ALChemy replying on A Modern Woman by Dovina 26 Nov 2005, 10:25 AM
That's no surprise. My last girlfriend was 41 remember. I would have hoped for something more along the line of: In 50 years womens thoughts will have turned to how best to prepare the manslave's penis, deep fried or fricasseed.