Re: a comment on Indian Song by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	28-Nov-05/5:53 AM
Thanks. This was inspired by the cleverly cryptic "r-p-o-p-h-e-s-s-a-g-r" poem by Cummings. Line 4 is a bit of a stretch. The 1st word of L4 is "Increased". The 1st word of line 5 is "So". Hope that helps a little.
Re: Low by wilco	cyan9 217.40.63.105	28-Nov-05/5:32 AM
meloncholy in a mellow way.
Re: Indian Song by ALChemy	cyan9 217.40.63.105	28-Nov-05/5:30 AM
After reading the comments below, Ive been looking for all sorts of hidden patterns... but nothing so far, otherwise it seems kind of like good ole hoe-down.
Re: Indian Song by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	28-Nov-05/4:10 AM
Clever. I'm not sure I got lines 4 and 5, but what I think I got I like.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	28-Nov-05/4:07 AM
Truly. But all this 'men don't understand women, women don't understand men, men are pigs, women are pigs' stuff is completely alien to me now. I guess there's nothing like living in a misogynist Muslim country to make people figure out their priorities.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	28-Nov-05/4:04 AM
Having just submitted a poem comparing Islamic terrorists to annoying mosquitoes, I'm in no position to talk.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 217.144.7.195	28-Nov-05/4:03 AM
The older I get, the more I realise how influenced I am by the whole O'Henry/sci-fi ironic twist. When I want to be literary, I tell myself it's O'Henry; when I'm realistic I tell myself it's sci-fi. You know he's buried in Asheville, NC, where I've spent a lot of the last eight years. The Islam movie is going to be pure visually-stunning plotless ensemble drama. Maybe unfortunately. "I promised that from now on I would write only for the Lord... [Jesus is] the ultimate supernatural hero, the ultimate immortal of them all." - Anne Rice, October 2005
Re: A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/6:49 PM
http://www.gnosis.org/library/marygosp.htm My Christmas gift to you Dovina.
Re: Indian Song by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/5:49 PM
This one's very experimental. Here's your hint, the first line is "Wildman".
Re: Low by wilco	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/11:41 AM
Send this to Garth Brooks, he'll make you rich.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/8:55 AM
You see. You're gone a few days and people forget you existed.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/8:46 AM
Oh, by the way I just finished Local Colour. I know I’m a procrastinator but after all it is the southern way. In some ways Bland and poemranker are alike, don’t you think? Was there a little nod to O’Henry in this one with the ironic surprise ending and the title choice? I think this is the best of the two. Certainly the most difficult to write I imagine. One of the few modern stories that I’d consider in my Rereadable category. I've only now come to realize that much of your southerness comes out in your similes and metaphors. They are always strange and colorful and way out of left field. It's a shame the public is force fed Anne Rice instead of stuff like this.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/8:23 AM
True enough. The worm as metaphor should be laid to rest I suppose. But my mind searches now for other underground dwellers to take it's place. The mole? No Taken. The serpent? No taken. The maggot? Damn you R. Lee Ermey. Taken. Hmmm...Eureka! I've got it. The GRUB. GoeRge BUsh. Whatcha think? I could practically superimpose it onto the word worm. With that done I think Maybe I can focus on a few more stanzas from the Afghan perspective. I hope this is what you meant 'cause I think I really like the Grub metaphor.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	27-Nov-05/7:40 AM
LOL Yeah, That was my little nod to Kubrick and Stone. I thought "How appropriate" but I was surprised and glad someone made the connection and didn't think I did it as a cheap gimmick.
Re: listen by elderking	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/6:07 AM
The last line's good; the first 8 don't make words do anything they haven't done for six hundred years at least.
Re: The Mask by TLRufener	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/6:06 AM
Yeah, you have to wonder if you're really going to be able to convey your feelings and experiences and make an accurate account of your life and times if you can only write 13-syllable sentences...
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/6:00 AM
It's not just that it's too focused; it's something like making a poem almost entirely out of images of a character named Sexy Sadie breaking the rules and making fools of everyone. Saying that the worm is only bringer of death (where Poe's is death/some grand lord-or-mascot of death) isn't enough. At least my Conqueror Worm is a mezcal worm and not anything to do very literally with death. And besides, I wrote it drunk, that's got to count for something. Yes, I can't think of a better image for Bush at the moment - but that is our job, isn't it? To come up with new hard-to-think-of images that seem so obvious and perfect to future generations looking to rip off easy images? No, it's neither too vague nor too obvious.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/5:58 AM
It's funny how no part of this conversation has any connection to my life or any woman I know. No, wait, that's not funny...
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/5:54 AM
I think that's because he's mainly discussing the conflict between the West and bin Laden's brand of jihadism, and not Islam in general. PS AlChemy: I really dug the rhyme and half-rhyme this time, and the way your rock references reflect the rock referencing of a million Vietnam War movies.
Re: a comment on One Second by TLRufener	zodiac 212.118.19.241	27-Nov-05/5:44 AM
I often agree with you, or at least grant you certain points, while you never agree with me. I'm sure by your logic this means you're winning.