Re: a comment on Thunder by dooley	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/4:27 PM
Because: "The thunder applauds us" "spurred by lightning our hearts . . . fall in love" "scares me to death Brings . . . a shake to my breath" "And there we will prove that some poems are wrong They are wordy and gusty and go on too long"
Re: Thunder by dooley	BrandonW 68.71.178.129	1-Dec-05/3:00 PM
Can someone please explain to me why this is good?
Re: a comment on Chills by BrandonW	BrandonW 68.71.178.129	1-Dec-05/2:54 PM
Yeah.. I don't usually like to write about drugs.. religon is hard get away from.. guess it's a Southern thing.. heh, I've actually been waiting for a reason to use 'insufflation' in a poem. I thought it worked well.. thanks
Re: The Bus by Dovina	wilco 24.92.74.122	1-Dec-05/2:51 PM
aw naw, hush that fuss. Everybody move to the back of the bus. I really thought this was going to be about Rosa Parks or Jerome Bettis....anyway, not bad.
Re: a comment on Chills by BrandonW	BrandonW 68.71.178.129	1-Dec-05/2:50 PM
I should have known.. it was the one line I wasn't sure about and the one line I settled on.. I'm sure I could come up with a better line.. I was just anxious to post it.. next time I'll know better
Re: I'm walking thorough void by Prince of Void	wilco 24.92.74.122	1-Dec-05/2:48 PM
ummm...okay, first, you need to move on from the whole "void" angle. It's wearing thin. Also, try some different styles and variations. Either get some prozac or some liquor (but just enough). Most of the good stuff is about pain and depression, but you need to work on saying it in a new way and making it interesting. Also work on your grammar and adjectives. Often, your lines make little sense because you're trying to put too much into them.
Re: a comment on I'm walking thorough void by Prince of Void	wilco 24.92.74.122	1-Dec-05/2:44 PM
You're having sex before you log on every day aren't you.
Re: Thunder by dooley	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/2:29 PM
I agree with zodiac, and if you stay here very long you'll know that's rare. You've don it again - put virtue lower than sin, at least to some. It seems a strange line at the end of a love poem. Too many words in many of the lines for my taste. But overall it's good.
Re: Silent Night by Dovina	rahson_s 65.217.153.100	1-Dec-05/2:13 PM
I dont know how you pulled it off, but... Rahson-
Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	1-Dec-05/2:12 PM
I'd just like to wish everyone on poemeranker a very happy World AIDS Day. (For those that don't know, the 1st of December is a very special time of year when people of all faiths and sexual orientations come together to celebrate AIDS.)
Re: Chills by BrandonW	rahson_s 65.217.153.100	1-Dec-05/2:10 PM
God forbid. rahson-
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/2:07 PM
I don't know if wilco is an atheist, but he seemed offended. See his comment below. I think I've offended darn near everyone with this, on this Thursday, thanks to Thor.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/2:00 PM
I have objected purposelessly. Apology accepted. Is there some other way to object? There truly is, as you have so often said, something I am not getting.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/1:53 PM
The gospel of Luke carries the most detail of the four, and is often considered the most reliable, except perhaps for Mark. Luke also probably wrote the book of Acts. There is disagreement on Mark's age during Jesus' later years. In any case, whoever wrote the book of Mark probably wrote from hearsay. May I ask why you have studied the criticism of bible texts?
Re: a comment on Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/1:41 PM
I think you said I did a you three years ago. I don’t know about that, but I did a me 1.5 years ago. Today, I’d either call it a prose poem or make it less verbose with better meter.
Re: Where Have We Gone by poetryman	rahson_s 65.217.153.100	1-Dec-05/1:31 PM
I like this one and yes I truly Care.
Re: Deep Thought by Dreammaker1024	rahson_s 65.217.153.100	1-Dec-05/1:30 PM
I'm digging this..
Re: a comment on it's damp after closing by hendrimike	hendrimike 69.253.194.186	1-Dec-05/12:07 PM
thanks...
Re: Thunder by dooley	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/11:33 AM
I read the comment so I didn't need to read the poem. I'm so sleepy. Sorry. Here>-10-
Re: a comment on Thunder by dooley	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/11:31 AM
It is one of my goals to some day rhyme above and love in a way that is not cliche at all.