Re: For my unborn by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	2-Dec-05/11:59 AM
In heaven SLEEP my children.
Re: Calenders, Painters and the Boy who imagined Everything by avery	Dovina 69.175.32.104	2-Dec-05/11:54 AM
A few suggestions: Use different styles if you want, but not within the same poem. Try for consistency of rhythm, like the rhythm you start with, for example. And try not to mix styles of language, like using "doth" (doeth)in a modedrn English poem. And try not use semicolons so much. And don't give up.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	2-Dec-05/11:44 AM
I do leave holes in my arguments, sometimes on purpose, to give zodiac or Dark Angel room to maneuver, but more often due to carelessness or ignorance. I find it flattering when all they can fault is spelling, grammar, or some trivial mistake. I don’t consider myself a Scrooge, but please accept a Scrooge’s gift: You can, within an hour’s time come at me with a hug and dis me for offensive Silent Night as if each thing I say were independent of the whole For that I thank you and expect no more than for each contrivance that I write to stand upon its own
Re: Light within darkness by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	2-Dec-05/10:13 AM
Could be a Christmas card, a kind of sad beauty. Jesus LIES buried.
Re: Searching by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 69.175.32.104	2-Dec-05/10:08 AM
Either you're trying to be funny or this is full of mistakes.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	2-Dec-05/5:15 AM
I guess it's partly because around here if you don't back your arguments up with some kind of legitimate documented support than people just fart in your face and accuse you of being full of shit. I honestly think you're much smarter than me in many ways but you'll leave little holes in your arguments were people can trump you by pointing out such pointless things as misspelled words or bad grammar or just a slight miswording. Then ignoring the actual point you were trying to make. I know I'm probably guilty of those very things but usually it's for the sake of humor.
Re: Shamefaced by Doug	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	2-Dec-05/4:54 AM
Offbeat but also off beat. Some apostrophe problems. Edit and make some cuts. 7
Re: Shamefaced by Doug	Caducus 80.168.172.4	2-Dec-05/1:51 AM
If more concise this could be good but as you're a bit of a dick for the way you critiqued my work I can't be bothered to waste my time. A shame because your work isn't half bad but you moan about how many hits your getting and you leave comments like - "your work sucks big panther nuts" Not the brightest crayon in the box are we.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/8:51 PM
Agreed.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/8:49 PM
Mine is surly takling about subjects related to the bible, but I don't think it's blasphemous because it doesn't berate God.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/8:45 PM
No, no. That's not what I meant by my admittedly cumbersome sentence. I meant that I don't search for information on a person or a subject and analyze everything that I can get my hands on unless I really want to discover the truth on that subject. It seemed to me that you were doing a lot of research on the origins of the gospels and I wondered why.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/6:11 PM
Yours is blasphemy because it's still talking about subjects related to the bible (go ahead and lie and say it doesn't). It's all about the Da Vinci Code which I'm actually not sure is blasphemous. But yours is vulgar (as you said before) so it's surely blasphemous.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/5:55 PM
I'm talking about not taking what the preacher says as the Gospel truth.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/5:53 PM
So you're saying you and your poems aren't worth the effort. Agreed. I didn't seek out anything. It started with a gift. I thought you'd like it. You stated something I disagreed with and God forbid I gave you my opinion. I saw something about the Mary Gospel on the history channel. I thought, "Dovina might get a kick out of this". It took me all of 30 seconds to find the link. Merry Christmas Scrooge.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/5:33 PM
Yes, but I do not seek out everything I find out about you and study it, trying to decide which items are the most credible.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/5:30 PM
For the same reason you don't take everything I say for the gospel.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/5:29 PM
I intended it to be offensive. The original words are offensively trite, and need a shaking like a lot of "sacred" add-ons do. I find it interesting that if Silent Night came out today as a new song, it would probably be shrugged off as something to make fun of.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Dec-05/5:22 PM
Notice he wasn't offended by mine and I was even a little bit racist in it. I wasn't offended. I just thought it was offensive and the other replies prove me right.
Re: One by rahson_s	Dovina 69.175.32.104	1-Dec-05/5:07 PM
More essay than poem. How does domination or elevation of a race affect equality among other races?
Re: a comment on Thunder by dooley	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	1-Dec-05/4:27 PM
It comes from the heart.