| Re: 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:07 PM |
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It is good to see you posting again, its good to see some new work from the old guard.
Blessed with nine.
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| Re: a comment on A List of Names Worth Listing by SupremeDreamer |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:05 PM |
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You know, I posses only so much ability to recall.
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| Re: a comment on A List of Names Worth Listing by SupremeDreamer |
SupremeDreamer 99.170.144.252 |
21-Aug-08/9:04 PM |
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Um... Well, ok, if you want to see your name there when it's not, who am I to rip up your dreams? Nothing Personal.
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| Re: Better Things by EAger to Offend |
Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102 |
21-Aug-08/7:59 PM |
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| Re: rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub |
FreeFormFixation 98.212.148.58 |
19-Aug-08/8:14 PM |
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sounds like rain to me, i like it
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| Re: a comment on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
Dovina 65.60.123.50 |
17-Aug-08/6:01 PM |
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Those Kansas remarks of last summer were like the wind pushing your backside if you're lucky. Today my bicycle leans next to the TV in coastal town of Southern California, intransit to town further south.
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| Re: Gadgets and Poems by Dovina |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
17-Aug-08/4:16 PM |
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D, I think the whole first sentence should go. I'd like to see the carpets rise be your opener. But that's me. hope you and Kansas are doing fine.
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| Re: a comment on Warlord by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
16-Aug-08/12:41 PM |
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Mnyeah. hit a slow spot myself. grindin' my way out. is there any other?
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| Re: a comment on Warlord by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 68.183.245.248 |
15-Aug-08/9:00 PM |
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Writin' just as much and just as wonderin'. Never get it, always try, keep askin', seldom find why. Guess I could post here more, already got more than anybody, and more in the Q. More what? Yeah, don't go there.
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| Re: ayow by skaskowski |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
15-Aug-08/4:59 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Warlord by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215 |
15-Aug-08/11:31 AM |
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Oh. 'Allo D. whatchadoin?
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| Re: Billy Collins by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:55 PM |
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My name is not Billy Collins
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:54 PM |
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Swallow it, you idiot! It's what you really want
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| Re: GOD'S MOST WONDERFUL CREATION by iowajerms |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:52 PM |
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| Re: Warlord by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 68.183.245.156 |
14-Aug-08/3:51 PM |
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Funny, the greener pasture and all that bovine fantasy. loved America / Loathed America - perfect.
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| Re: About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote |
hobojo 24.143.147.163 |
12-Aug-08/12:15 AM |
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| Re: WISHES SHE COULD FORGET and FLOWERS BY THE ROCK by iowajerms |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/3:45 PM |
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Why do you add two poems? Is it because you couldn't wait to hear how awful your stuff is?
"oh but, you know, they're both talking about the same thing. it's really-"
FUCK. OKAY.
Well just fix the last two rhymes in the first poem. Too much... force. Didn't flow well at all compared to the rest.
The second poem, I find not horrible.
How do you expect to rate this? I'm actually gonna rate this and you put me a predicament. thanks.
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| Re: Social Studies is for MORANS!! by T. Jonathron Remp |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/3:37 PM |
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Unfortunately, I tried your poetry and not even sea salt helped it's extreme blandness.
Do you plan on being a horrible rapper when you grow up?
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| Re: Hum by Nepanthe |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/12:35 PM |
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is this the entire thing?
It's good as some kind of saying or whatever. But a poem?? give me more and we'll talk.
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| Re: GOD'S MOST WONDERFUL CREATION by iowajerms |
Blindpoetry 70.189.1.177 |
7-Aug-08/12:33 PM |
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YOUR NEXT POEM SHOULD BE ABOUT CAPS LOCK
change dull to dim and we'll talk.
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