Re: Repeated Behavior by hobojo	Bethy 165.154.46.148	12-Sep-08/9:24 AM
my thoughts exactly...get out of my head...lol
Re: Let's Forget About Last Night by jessicazee	Bethy 165.154.46.148	12-Sep-08/9:20 AM
a little difficult to read, but it gave me a few chuckles
Re: Coffee or Love by Nepanthe	jessicazee 69.215.128.178	11-Sep-08/3:14 AM
Love it.
Re: a comment on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	Bethy 165.154.46.58	10-Sep-08/12:43 PM
Thx my friend, your poetry has made me smile many times as well. :)
Re: a comment on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	Bethy 165.154.46.58	10-Sep-08/12:40 PM
I'm glad you liked it, and thx for the comments on my other poem as well. You flatter me...I got lots more...lol
Re: a comment on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	Bethy 165.154.46.58	10-Sep-08/12:37 PM
Thx SD, I'm sorry too, chuckle-chuckle and thx for the promising "next time" lol
Re: a comment on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	Bethy 165.154.46.58	10-Sep-08/12:34 PM
Thx Dovina, been there, done that, a few times lol
Re: a comment on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina	Dovina 75.82.253.189	10-Sep-08/10:57 AM
I think you are both batty
Re: .: night owl (1) by elementalidad	elementalidad 190.154.244.220	10-Sep-08/10:50 AM
This is my first attempt at writing senryu. This series of 5 senryu tries to maintain a recurrent theme of sleep and darkness. I feel like some of the first attempts here to come lack the essence of true senryu, however, I'm keeping my head up :) PS: The others in the series will follow shortly as I don't wish to put them all on one submission as I've seen some people do with shorter senryu / haiku.
Re: a comment on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:29 AM
I saw a gal in a bookstore once (imagine that!). I think she would write out her piece in long lines, then accordian the paper left to right and then fold/strike/fold/strike words almost at random. I'm assuming alot here, but still. This is to say I agree with your suggestion.
Re: SWF seeks SWM by Bethy	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:24 AM
-more nuts, this is wrong. hahahahahaha.
Re: :: chameleon by elementalidad	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:22 AM
I disagree with Dovina on this one. I think it's the best of the four.
Re: a comment on :: snowsounds by elementalidad	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:20 AM
I'm gonna back Dovina. Loosen the reins a little element-
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:08 AM
I'd like to see the first line gone. The title covers it. But the Main part, I'd like to see really odd things there, not the drugs and the sex etc. Not that true grunge doesn't have a place, I'm just not one for "shock" value. Write another one my way please, and I'll compare, and, maybe concede. Whaddaya got ta lose?
Re: a comment on 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub	INTRANSIT 69.23.141.215	10-Sep-08/10:03 AM
I read it again and see what you mean. But, I think there is enough expressiveness in the two previous lines. Though, I know repetetiveness is a tool I have not yet learned. Gonna post up ?
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	Bethy 165.154.46.44	8-Sep-08/12:09 PM
its good to know things are taken care of in the event of the writers demise, tip n all...however, i feel a little dirty and almost sinister when i say i like this poem...i figure its my dark side comin' out ...bravo, good one
Re: Time to Leap* edited by hobojo	Bethy 165.154.46.44	8-Sep-08/12:03 PM
I really like this, hits home somewhere in the middle...
Re: a comment on Suicide Note(Broken Down) by alvinb	alvinb 124.217.79.105	8-Sep-08/1:04 AM
tnx man,...
Re: Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	alvinb 124.217.79.105	8-Sep-08/1:03 AM
Nice one dude... now will you give me the better Exit srategy???
Re: a comment on :: snowsounds by elementalidad	SupremeDreamer 64.9.237.147	7-Sep-08/1:40 PM
Well I'm sure I've read other poems with reference to owls, etc. Don't mind me, I suffer from periodic strikes of deja-vu.