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:: chameleon (Haiku) by elementalidad climate fluctuates-
little color changer waits
basking on a stone
Up the ladder:
Children of adults
Down the ladder:
Where are all the poets?
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: September 4, 2008 9:58 PM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2008 10:01 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.397343 Overall Rank: 3188 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 64.9.233.156
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5-Sep-08/6:08 PM
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Observant Nature. Classic execution. Nine.
yep, another 575 haiku, straight laced and proper. It needs an "a" to begin Line 2.
thanks Supreme and Dovina for your comments across my first three (ever) haikus. Why do you recommend I start with an a on line 2 here? Just curious as I'm learning :)
I disagree with Dovina on this one. I think it's the best of the four.
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