Re: Sunlighting by ALChemy	Joe-joe 170.28.4.4	5-Jan-06/5:45 AM
Al, Very nice. I love the way you flip traditional perception in the first line. It sets the tone for the balance of the poem which creatively describes the dawning of day while playfully personifying the relationship between moon and sun...at least that's the way I read it. Joe
Re: a comment on Sunlighting by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	5-Jan-06/5:30 AM
Thanks. It's rare for most people to say things that sound original and yet you seem to have a knack for it. That's where I think I envy you most. I actually misspelled "Don" as "Dawn" but I'm not quite sure which one works better now. What do you think?
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	PoeticXTC 64.12.116.135	4-Jan-06/8:28 PM
Very descriptive, i love it. That 0 that Rockmage gave you was obviously flawed. There are blunt and clear assholes on this thing. I didn't mean to curse but sometimes it's called for. I loved you poem alot...
Re: Sunlighting by ALChemy	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	4-Jan-06/8:11 PM
Fuck witty. Though it's all I have at the moment. I'll take quality (like yours) over witty any day of the week. I think l-3 could lose the (the) and be A-OK. fackit. 10
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/6:17 PM
Personally I embrace contradictions. It's helps you get along with people better.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/6:11 PM
But when your imagination exceeds your ability it can be a depressing. Rodin's sculpture "The Thinker" is about that.
Re: We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/6:04 PM
Hah! Once again it seems we posted poems on simular subjects. See, God does speak to us. And by God I mean TV. Witty stuff.
Re: Goodbye Sad Door by woodstock20000	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/5:58 PM
Could have many different meanings. I kind of wish it was a little bit more specific as it sounds pretty personal. End it sad or happy or hopeful. Which ever way you like. It still sounds good.
Re: Claim to Call by MacFrantic	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/5:51 PM
The fragmented sentences don't seem to work for this. The last half of the poem is great.
Re: Half Hearted by elderking	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/5:41 PM
The flow is too marching band-like for a love poem. Don't be afraid to bleed one line into the other by continuing the sentence or changing the meter slightly to slow or quicken the pace for added effect. Maybe something like this: Those half hearted chances at loving once more in half tried romances leave me wanting for impassioned embraces. But allowed just so close. My loving heart races, while ours reach "almost". These pleasures, half tasted, amount to as much as kisses wasted, and hearts untouched.
Re: This Is Me by PoeticXTC	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/4:11 PM
You forgot to describe yourself as like a niggard with money and a wet back when working.
Re: a comment on light [edited] by lmp	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/4:02 PM
"My love's eyes are nothing like the sun".-Shakespeare
Re: light [edited] by lmp	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/3:57 PM
Lose the "The". Nice Haiku.
Re: Shut Me Up by D. $ Fontera	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/3:53 PM
It's perfect in a plain and ordinary kind of way.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.89	4-Jan-06/3:51 PM
And a vivid imagination comes with the territory, I see. Enviable in a way.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.89	4-Jan-06/3:49 PM
Only zodiac and dark angel have no contradictions.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/3:27 PM
I've already admitted that I'm a bit of a contradiction. That's my conundrum.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	4-Jan-06/3:24 PM
Some words just never look right to me unless I spell them wrong. "their" is another one. I always want to spell it as "thier". It's not that I see words backwords or jumbled anymore. I just sometimes remember them mixed up. So reading isn't hard for me although it's probably a little slower but writing is a bit harder. One of the reasons I started writing poetry was for practice.
Re: a comment on We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.138	4-Jan-06/3:15 PM
Well I'll be. I hve to change my spelling of balsa. I could swear I saw it spelled -asso once. Too long ago I guess.
Re: a comment on The Forgetting by Dovina	Dovina 209.247.222.89	4-Jan-06/3:11 PM
I'm sorry then. Were you really serious about spelling tongue as "tounge" several times running?