| Re: Ode to Seduction by MacFrantic |
LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135 |
2-Feb-06/8:21 AM |
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| Re: Ode to Seduction by MacFrantic |
LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135 |
2-Feb-06/8:20 AM |
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I'll let someone else corerect your punctuation...it need work...but this is cool.
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| Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina |
LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135 |
2-Feb-06/7:27 AM |
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LOL, Dovina...here again is that theory that we ARE all canibals! We consume, digest and regurgitate. Of course the mixture is always individually digested and spewn in some way unique, if we are lucky....
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| Re: a comment on Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135 |
2-Feb-06/7:16 AM |
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Okay...you cleared that up...
now post THAT reply (as a poem), so I can vote on IT!...it is as good as, and better than, some stuff I've seen on here!
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| Re: Nomads by amanda_dcosta |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
2-Feb-06/4:06 AM |
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Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't haikus supposed to have 5 syllables in the first and last lines?
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| Re: a comment on yo yo yo, ride by FreeFormFixation |
FreeFormFixation 70.225.164.221 |
2-Feb-06/3:34 AM |
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| Re: Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
2-Feb-06/12:27 AM |
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Reading all the stuff put down here, I'm inspired to write a poem titled "Dreamer". As for your poem.... its good. its got matter and a sense of imagining where you are.
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| Re: The Book of Images by Dovina |
amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37 |
1-Feb-06/10:44 PM |
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Dovina.... very good. a good collection of images. I think I will vote you a -10-. I have been reading all the reviews here, and have taken note of advice given, for you to improve on your style, or write some matter of your own, (not to copy ideas) or to read other major poets(eg. Keats) etc. what I would like to point out is that, almost everybody copies ideas, or copy the style of some poet or the other. If Keats could have his style, or Blake have his, I don't see why you can't have your own style or view on what you want to present. So for that reason I think I'd vote you what I did. Am I being abstract?
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| Re: Valentine? by celticskatermatt1 |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
1-Feb-06/8:06 PM |
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looks like it's written by a hop-hop Eskimo trying to crossover to boy-band inspired greeting cards.
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| Re: a comment on Even the elephants by ecargo |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
1-Feb-06/8:02 PM |
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It seems that you've already conjured the images, you only need to find the proper words. Don't give up on this.
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| Re: Penny Loafer Blues by ALChemy |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
1-Feb-06/7:58 PM |
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Creative idea(very creative). I think you should trim it a little for greater impact. But don't fiddle with it too much, it might lose its charm.
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| Re: A Cleansing Of Creeds by Caducus |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
1-Feb-06/5:36 PM |
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This is damn good. The first two stanzas don't add anything to the statement made here
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| Re: Even the elephants by ecargo |
god'swife 71.103.98.44 |
1-Feb-06/5:33 PM |
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It's a bit strained. Though I do like the use of mostly one syllable words, it seems to stutter and I can't get a clear image.
You've out-Plathed Plath.
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| Re: Valentine? by celticskatermatt1 |
Nicholas Jones 86.135.241.4 |
1-Feb-06/12:50 PM |
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I hate postmodernism, it's become impossible to tell when something is cleverly ironic and deconstructive or just shit. On this one I'm going for the latter.
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| Re: a comment on Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones |
ecargo 167.219.88.140 |
1-Feb-06/11:19 AM |
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No, I'm more of a pinch potter.
But I did write a terribly tedious paper as an undergrad on Vorticism, an offshoot of Imagism, discussing Pound and Brzeska and the parallels between the two artists (and art forms). I was "dancing" at the time to make tuition (Yale is so expensive!) and titled my paper "Stripping, the Metaphor." I got a B- (he took points off for the "misplaced" comma).
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| Re: Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
1-Feb-06/11:15 AM |
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I like CS Lewis on the use of imagination. His image of the lion in Narnia, for example, came as a dream, but he developed the image, the character, beyond the initial vision using logic and allusion. Your duck walking on ice, and confused by the image of walking on water, is ready, as think you might be implying, to make something poetic and meaningful from that experience.
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| Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
1-Feb-06/10:59 AM |
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Nothing much at all. That's right. Thank you for commenting.
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| Re: a comment on Penny Loafer Blues by ALChemy |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
1-Feb-06/10:47 AM |
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Man you guys are getting darn good at this. I wasn't expecting anyone to pick up on the more subtle parts of the poem. Wow.
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| Re: a comment on Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
1-Feb-06/10:35 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Giving in to a boring suggestion by Joe-joe |
Joe-joe 170.28.4.4 |
1-Feb-06/10:14 AM |
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I would if I could but you can see that I have:
"il o h ae f y rmln rtes
Yed t te ft o m tebig bohr." translated = yield(ed) to the fate of my trembling brothers...the guys in in office didn't catch the bouncing characters so I'm not so sure my little lettering play was detected here.
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