Re: Owain Glyndwr by Nicholas Jones	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/1:30 PM
You realise if you wanted you could go to Owain Glyndwr in Cardiff; Friday night's rock and metal night. By Burger King, just opposite the castle. Oh, and great poem!
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/1:22 PM
Cannibals? No, they're far more likely to swing other peoples' hips in alluring manners. As for the disappearing comments, I'm sure there's something not quite right going on at the moment, lots of poems are listed as having more comments than can be seen, and some are listed as having none when they have been commented on. It's an enigma.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:15 PM
Thanks for the ten, but it is really a very simplistic poem, designed only to show that much of the Bible is composed of images. When they say I am merely copying and saying the obvious, they are correct.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:14 PM
Yes, but some cannibals are cute, intriguing, interesting, insightful, or swing their hips in alluring manners.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:06 PM
Hey, Alchemy, what's going on? I know you made comments that preceeded my comments above, but where are they? Mine look kinda silly without them. I think you said it's ironic that my poem is about about imagery, but does not use imagery, to which I gave you a poem using imagry. You also said something about what it takes to get a 10, to which I spoke of Jesus' beard. Did you delete these comments?
Re: a comment on Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones	Nicholas Jones 86.135.254.169	2-Feb-06/11:47 AM
Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I think the first stanza does make sense. Perhaps it needs the addition of the world 'place' - We would call this PLACE peaceful'. The point we would it peaceful, and it is in comparison to the town, but there are actually still lots of noises, including traffic. I could articulate the sense of place better, more description, but at this point the poem is meant to be pseudo-imagistic. No single image is sufficient - neither peacefulness or noise - because context is so important. So pure imagism would lead to distortion, because I could only a purely imagist poem by ignoring certain aspects of the scenario. It's not about the narrator being at peace or not (this isn't the pathetic fallacy at work) but about the place. Poetics = a theory or set of beliefs about poetry. It's a word, haven't you heard of it? Like Aristotle's Poetics. The influence at this point I guess is Hugh MacDiarmid, who wrote a long poem called something like 'The Kind of Poetry I Want' which lists many images - a poetry like a man playing a billiard shot or shooting a gun and who analyses and considers carefully all the appropriate factors. But I'm not writing MacDiarmid's poetry of fact (although elsewhere I do attempt to) but a poetry of imagery (the images are of course influenced by the imagists, that's the point) that contains other things besides. I want to include things that don't fit to create internal cohesion actually based on contradiction. Not sure if any of that makes sense. The point is, the duck on the frozen lake is confused, surprised, there's contradiction at work; that's what I'm poetry can do, whereas imagism is paring everything down to a level which denies complexity. I think.
Re: Unhappy Marriages by Caducus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/10:07 AM
Cynicism is certainly your speciality. I don't get as much from this one as from most of your poems...there's some good lines like 'sleep as squandered pearls', but it's lacking a certain punch at the moment. I don't know...maybe I'm talking rubbish.
Re: self-righteousness by calliope	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/10:02 AM
I think I get it.
Re: inadequate by skaskowski	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/9:57 AM
Well it's not bad, but there's not much more I can say.
Re: Les Imagistes by Nicholas Jones	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/9:24 AM
maybe : punctuation would make first stanza more clear?> We would call this peaceful, and it IS quiet, compared to the noise of the urban morning and the tapping of the office workers. (never mind...it doesn't work...unless you went on to say something about the false perception of feeling peaceful.(But I am in no way at peace.) at and 2nd stanza, it would need "so it isn't exactly quiet, either. at the end, to explain your 'but still'. Do you think, or do I see? You are saying you think, so drop the 'you see' in 3rd stanza. a poetics like a duck...> ? poet's, poetic's (A 'poet is' like...?)
Re: Penny Loafer Blues by ALChemy	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	2-Feb-06/8:58 AM
Isn't it supposed to be size 11 soles? (U wrote 'souls') Is it to imply anything? Nice poem..Good story. Prose form good.... though I would have liked it in shorter lines. Seems to take away some of the emphasis. But the story.... I have to give it to you! Cheers!
Re: Valentine? by celticskatermatt1	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:56 AM
LOL...God's wife...and I'm with you Nich
Re: A Cleansing Of Creeds by Caducus	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:54 AM
The first 2 stanza seem like you were going to write something else...seems disconnected in style from the rest of it. This is not the first I have seen lately drawing parallels. Surprised you didn't throw Sudan into the mix, but hey, you did address this well. (I am relieved when I see other drawing the parallels, too. Gives me some sort of faith in intellegence. Basing my score on your Dropping the first two stanzas, and using them somewhere else, as they ARE rather unigue.
Re: Nomads by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	2-Feb-06/8:50 AM
http://www.haikuworld.org/begin/mdwelch.apr2003.html
Re: Even the elephants by ecargo	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:42 AM
...and hide like the sky? Consider dropping one of the 'hard' (at eyes, IMO) 3rd. stanza a little bit uncomfortable in rythm. I like this...just needs a tweak.
Re: Unhappy Marriages by Caducus	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:37 AM
This has some great moments...keep working on it.
Re: Unhappy Marriages by Caducus	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:36 AM
Grammar! You attempt puncuation...get help with that. Unclear in places..."owned by leaves and wax"
Re: stormcast (a true story) by FreeFormFixation	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:33 AM
I'm confused. Take a breath, calm down and then tell me again; what happened?
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	2-Feb-06/8:29 AM
It's even 3-5-3, 4-6-4, 5-7-5.....I think it works like this. I could be wrong. Tis might help - http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/#howtowritehaiku
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.135	2-Feb-06/8:26 AM
Ranger, I believe they are supposed to. 5-7-5 and some have a - afer the 2nd. line. Are the birds wandering or flying? 'in the sky so high'...uhm...needs work. Concept> birds, flying, "Oh tell me where" great ending to that concept, but add one necessary word, to make 5 syllables.