Re: Tonight (edit) by drnick	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.134	2-Feb-06/7:36 PM
I'm not sure what "I want to push you away with intent to invite" means...? that by pushing away, you know it will invite? other than that...this is cool...I like that you leave things half said...and it is not hard to deduct the rest of what is not being said. Very good.
Re: A Walk in the Park by Dovina	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.134	2-Feb-06/7:30 PM
aww...I like this! It suprised me with where it went! The first two stanza are so strong...could stand alone and on there own just fine, IMO.
Re: By Request by thepinkbunnyofdoom	LilMsLadyPoet 207.69.139.134	2-Feb-06/7:26 PM
Someone who does puncuation will probably count all those commas, and suggest a period here or there, instead...but, I'd be fine, and this would work without any punctuation at all...as the format guides italong just fine! (and thanks!)
Re: a comment on inadequate by skaskowski	Dovina 67.72.98.86	2-Feb-06/5:20 PM
That would be using a poetic-sounding slogan for rhetorical purposes, which is unethical. It would be like saying “Racist, sexist, anti-gay, George Bush go away” because the sound of it lends a perception of truth. Or marching in Washington, chanting “This is what democracy looks like,” then pointing to the Supreme Count while shouting, “That is what hypocrisy looks like.” I’m above that.
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 67.72.98.86	2-Feb-06/5:07 PM
Learing to cook means using what's in the fridge.
Re: Even the elephants by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/3:33 PM
Such a good concept. It needs more details. Paint us a vivid scene and then reveal their doom at the end and it will probably pack a bigger punch.
Re: Nomads by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/3:21 PM
I'd like to see you get the standard Haiku down right first before you mess too much with other forms. You're getting much closer.
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/3:18 PM
This link doesn't work.
Re: a comment on Penny Loafer Blues by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/3:17 PM
Yep, "Soles". I didn't give it a good enough proofread before I posted. Thanks Amanda. I'll try to get a revised version up this weekend.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/2:59 PM
Just an experiment. Didn't work though.
Re: a comment on inadequate by skaskowski	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/2:45 PM
So your saying his poem "inadequate" is inadequate?
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	2-Feb-06/2:42 PM
Don't you think you should learn to cook before you start writing your own recipes?
Re: Nomads by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/2:05 PM
You will always get quibbles about 5-7-5 in a haiku here on poemranker unless you toe the line. Other are not so picky. I see the birds as not really wandering, as you understand them, giving more than average credit to birds. Thats good.
Re: inadequate by skaskowski	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/2:00 PM
Good up to the last line, which kills it.
Re: Unhappy Marriages by Caducus	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:57 PM
"Free spirits caged on a pedestal" - great line. "masques" I think you mean "with twice sung hymns" grammar Married to God implies a num, but the preceeding seem like a human marriage. the title seem too descriptive, too blunt.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:44 PM
Nothing on poemranker is too cheeky. Ask away, but personal experience always leads to the best poems, and I have never swung nor been swung.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/1:40 PM
Can I request that you write a poem about cannibalism and hip swinging? Or am I being too cheeky here?
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/1:38 PM
Ah, I understand now.
Re: Untouchable by rahson_s	Ranger 62.252.32.15	2-Feb-06/1:37 PM
Presumably not an advisable situation to be in.
Re: a comment on The Book of Images by Dovina	Dovina 67.72.98.87	2-Feb-06/1:36 PM
lol on the swinging hips. If a comment is deleted, it still counts in the number of comments, so the counter is not a reliable guide. Also, if a poem has received comments, but no votes, the comments do not always enter the comment counter. No, what happened to Alchemy's comments needs a better explanation.