Re: a comment on About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:43 AM
Tom, you know my fucking name. It's Lee. The same name I had when we were shooting up heroin in the bushes lining the chapel we camped at in Portland. !DOH!
Re: a comment on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:34 AM
You'd never be able to find my hiding spots boy. You're addressing a professional steetbum, not a shoddy poser, you silly child!
Re: a comment on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:32 AM
That's how I'd like to kill myself if I decided that that was the best option left to me. Sorry if that's too boring for you. I can characterize it and make it the suicide of a bisexual transvestite who is obsessed with occult ritual if you'd like. Being odd is not a difficult task for me. ;)
Re: a comment on Suicide Note [Disposal Instructions Included] by SupremeDreamer	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:25 AM
Do your damned job and consume the weaklings. They're all-over the fucking rankerville dragging their wet blankets and spewing hallmark emo-love-thy-neighbor-and-honor-his-virgin-daughter baby shit all over the fucking place. You can oil thy own bum and then accept the rod of brutal disgrace. Do you not see that your horrid crustaceans have allowed the embrowning to envelope the whole bloody ship? Enough of indulging your twisted faggotry in the lower decks! Perfom thy holy function, you misplaced cumquat!!
Re: Broken Heart by Luul A	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:03 AM
Oh god, what a wet blanket dripping bedpee all-over the fucking place. What the fuck is wrong with you?
Re: Dancing with the Devil by Liam Wallace	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/7:01 AM
Don't question the meaning of the dance. Dance and let the meaning express itself. You get a three only because I like the title and you display a wee-bit of cleverness.
Re: A Way With Words by LARoundtree	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/6:57 AM
Take your hallmark style cliche and that didactic expression of a lambs vacuous ethic and go back to your "happy place". Stay there and don't sully the taste of those who sustain themselves on a diet of meat & cold glasses of reality. If you don't? You'll be the next chop that I devour in an act of savagery.
Re: Marrakech Watercolours by Caducus	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/6:47 AM
It's got soul. More soul than I posses.
Re: when light cannot see your face by daggatolar	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/6:44 AM
Apparently you also can not write either. Stop grasping for the appearance of profoundness. You haven't gripped upon anything but the air and your own literary flatulence.
Re: Always by hobojo	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/6:36 AM
The use of the word like in the manner you've employed it above? Don't. Saying "will forever last" in a vain attempt to avoid saying the tired "will last forever"? Don't. Repetetive redundancy? Eliminate it. If it's constant, then there's no need to say it'll last forever. Do not ever cheapen what you are trying to express in such ways. You need to reconsider the way you go about constructing your poems. Become thy editor motherfucker! Consider this: You are the eternal sundown setting, the distant rain pouring down, an ocean wave receding-- lingering in the distance just beyond my grasp. You are the ever-present reminder of pleasant memories; maintaining the sadness, making me yearn for the past. Yesterday has long since passed, but you're still here, always. --That's just a quickie example. Notice the difference?- Clear, fluid, with a crisp finish. It's not what you're saying, it's how you say it. Capiche? Find thy style and, by god, develop it.
Re: Surreptitious merchandise and company held here by A. Nomaly	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/2:12 AM
The ending seems purposely designed to confuse. That or you were seized by an epileptic episode.
Re: Realizations by hobojo	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/2:09 AM
Life sucks the soul right out of a ripe tit don't it?
Re: Daydream Delusions by hobojo	DreamerSupreme 75.18.164.147	15-Dec-08/12:49 AM
The ghosts of our dreams grip us with the fingers of eternity... they are our real addiction- that which we see yet can not attain. Do not allow the misery or intoxication to warp thy craft with pimple-like amateurism. Seek to use these aspects of your mental enviroment to focus and sharpen the blade utilized in the execution. No Vote.
Re: 2012 by winniss	SupremeDreamer 75.30.224.6	14-Dec-08/11:13 PM
... No, no. You're not doing it right. Ever hear of haiku? Fuck, I'll do it for you.
Re: Waking by Sasha	SupremeDreamer 75.30.224.6	14-Dec-08/11:09 PM
I say scrap this as a sonnet and slash s1 and let s2 stand alone. Just my opinion.
Re: Watching December's Wind by dclark	SupremeDreamer 75.30.224.6	14-Dec-08/11:06 PM
Grasping at straw in the wind. It wasn't that quaint.
Re: travel down, stop sign by skaskowski	SupremeDreamer 75.30.224.6	14-Dec-08/11:03 PM
Seems like the ending needs fine tuning.. or perhaps I'm just itching at ghosts.
Re: a comment on Love doesn't cure IV injections of hate. by SupremeDreamer	hobojo 24.143.147.163	4-Dec-08/4:33 PM
Wow, parallel lives...
Re: a comment on About Death & Hell? Hell can be a State of Living. by Don-Quixote	hobojo 24.143.147.163	4-Dec-08/4:23 PM
I again come back to your poem... it really captures my current state, evaluating my inability to engage in life - thank you for writing this.
Re: The Hundredth End by versus_u	Lifeboatman 216.150.191.2	4-Dec-08/3:14 PM
I imagine this being written more than six years ago, and it is... how much you were of a grown up then in your own universe, and how you are still growing in this... been a while, dear.... hope you are fine.