Re: a comment on My love is drowning in PCP by T. Jonathron Remp	T. Jonathron Remp 74.192.174.220	7-Apr-09/5:17 PM
I like "your maternal grandfather's colored ancestors from Port-au-Prince". The rest doesn't work so much for me.
Re: Graveyard(Cry of the living) by alvinb	Christof 87.115.33.229	6-Apr-09/6:39 AM
A lovely stare? Lovely forced rhyme, more like it.
Re: I want you by nicole081083	Christof 87.115.33.229	6-Apr-09/6:37 AM
I fully expect to hear this lyric attached to a Miley Cyrus song soon. I don't mean this as a compliment.
Re: battle of the sexes by i love my midget	Christof 87.115.33.229	6-Apr-09/6:35 AM
Your argument didn't really get you anywhere did it? Neither did your poem. This is a tiresome subject tiresomely recounted.
Re: Fake Door County Trip by jessicazee	Christof 87.115.33.229	6-Apr-09/6:32 AM
There a plenty of things I don't understand here - I'm being very stupid today, blame it on jet lag as I've just flown back from New York. For one, the title is meaningless to me; secondly, I have no idea what you mean about your trip to the store being handbasketed. However, I love the first stanza and the conversational tone of this.
Re: I want you by nicole081083	Freethinker1602 96.255.158.119	1-Apr-09/6:15 AM
it's not so terrible, has a good ring when read aloud. gets mundane in the middle and not as good in the end. the beginning is good. don't listen to those jerks. what may help also, right in a code,images. say the person has blue eyes, you could write "lovely blue jay you flew away before you even landed you left my branches bare i tried to catch you but you're too cunning emptiness makes my heart tare" just a suggestion helps make the poem reading and writing more fun and interesting.
Re: a comment on Captian, Doctor..Father by celticskatermatt1	celticskatermatt1 72.197.172.243	31-Mar-09/8:12 PM
i guess thats life sometimes
Re: A Fart For All Mankind by Edna Sweetlove	i love my midget 209.20.88.10	30-Mar-09/6:41 AM
This is great. Everybody else are cunt-holes.
Re: a comment on I want you by nicole081083	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	27-Mar-09/7:22 AM
It's a title that anyone and everyone can identify with, n'est-ce pas?
Re: a comment on Graveyard(Cry of the Dead) by alvinb	alvinb 124.217.91.228	18-Mar-09/6:56 PM
coz dey are w8ing for their loved ones...
Re: a comment on tone-deaf or color-blind by nentwined	nentwined 75.83.196.201	11-Mar-09/8:30 PM
er, right--the audio. Linked @ http://kaolinfire.livejournal.com/441148.html
Re: tone-deaf or color-blind by nentwined	nentwined 75.83.196.201	11-Mar-09/8:29 PM
I've been poeming a lot since ... last Friday, I think. I hit on a new voice in a few of them, and I'm trying to figure that out--but in the meantime, thoughts seem to be wanting to express themselves in this form. This is a thought, not something that's looking for publication, so it's not hidden for future re-working. In fact, as I'm listening to some beautiful YouTube mash-ups [[ http://thru-you.com/ ]] by a person named (or calling himself) Kutiman, I'd love to create some sort of dialog out of it. So: I hereby release the poem and its accompanying audio into the public domain; if you see some promise in either, do with them as thou wilt. And I'd love to know what you think. :) I'm particularly unhappy with s3--I don't think it says what it needs to, but my thoughts started to falter (and my rhythm, though a part of me hopes that works ;) ). And perhaps I don't explore the metaphor (if it's really a metaphor) enough in the first two stanzas... and the fear is important, but I just touch on it (that was supposed to be the core as much as the "sounds", but it didn't go that way).
Re: a comment on Dream Samurai by Lifeboatman	nentwined 75.83.196.201	10-Mar-09/7:05 PM
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, I see. :) It all makes a lot more sense now.
Re: a comment on My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	Lifeboatman 124.106.53.170	10-Mar-09/7:02 PM
ah...
Re: Redemption on the mat. by SupremeDreamer	Lifeboatman 124.106.53.170	10-Mar-09/7:00 PM
yup.. make his enemies feel pain.. 8
Re: a comment on Dream Samurai by Lifeboatman	Lifeboatman 124.106.53.170	10-Mar-09/6:58 PM
Think PVC, think long...
Re: a comment on Dream Samurai by Lifeboatman	Lifeboatman 124.106.53.170	10-Mar-09/6:57 PM
SO you still show yourself around these parts... I wrote this about a decade ago, and my my bong was makeshift from 1.5 Coke bottles. hehehe
Re: a comment on My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 82.178.134.179	9-Mar-09/10:34 PM
Blindpoetry / nentwined - :-) Thanks for the comments. valuable. Would like to point out though that this is what our thoughts are about most often. We try to sort things out, we wonder why somethings happen, especially when we cannot find a reasonable explanation. Its like - is it this , or is it that. It is not necessary to have come to an answer at that moment, but this verse is an expression of 'wondering'. Just the very act of thinking !
Re: a comment on Final Dates, part 1: through gates of smoke and salt by Bill Z Bub	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	9-Mar-09/5:53 PM
I didn't pick one because its meant to imply a timeless moment. Thanks for the nine and the kind words.
Re: My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	nentwined 75.83.196.201	9-Mar-09/11:20 AM
I really don't get what you're trying to convey here. Ditto Blindpoetry, really. Do you know too much or too little? Or if that's the basis of your conundrum, help me realize that better. Comes off as pretentious and empty.