| Re: a comment on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
31-Oct-06/6:36 AM |
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More predictable turd -0-
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| Re: a comment on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
ALChemy 71.75.187.195 |
31-Oct-06/6:24 AM |
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What's the use of having perfect grammar if you're still just a vulgar hag despite it? Tell me that, Gov'na or me-lady or whatever you are.
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| Re: a comment on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove |
ALChemy 71.75.187.195 |
31-Oct-06/5:09 AM |
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You seem to be so upset over a little neglection of spelling. Nah, I just got to you that's all. It was so easy too.
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| Re: Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/4:16 AM |
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I had a comment to make, but seeing as the author is a total fuck, I'll keep it to myself. Edna=0 Just because. :)
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| Re: Suburban Spleen by Sasha |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/4:10 AM |
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| Re: Fare Price (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20 |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/4:05 AM |
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If you think your religion/church is so blood sucking than why do you still follow it? Or have you recently left a church? I have never practiced religion for these obvious reasons. Spirituality > Religion. Find a unique way to say it instead of staing the obvious.
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| Re: Silver Lining by Wakeboarder20 |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/3:50 AM |
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Cliche anyone? Im not trying to be a jerk, but you need to try to get out of cliche mode. Make your point from a semi-unique angle. If you talk about a specific experience, the obvious points will come though wihtout you having to tell us. Tell us instead about the intricacies of the experience. The name of the poem itself is a cliche.
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| Re: Jesus Around Your Neck (Final Version) by Wakeboarder20 |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/3:35 AM |
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Try leading your audience instead of telling them what to think. I hate whining.
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| Re: Politick by Wakeboarder20 |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/3:30 AM |
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We've all seen the three piece suit politician you're talking about. Cigars, briefcases, etc. A poem is much better if you make the point from a DIFFERENT angle. Lead us on a bit, make us work a bit to get to the solution.
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| Re: leavetaking by daniella |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/3:20 AM |
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Im sorry, it's just not written well.
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| Re: 311006 txt to russia by daniella |
half.italian 70.36.242.152 |
31-Oct-06/3:02 AM |
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I like this very much. Although the form seems to beg to be rid of line three and four, and replaced with 'rolling across deserts'. You are very close. The title sucks. I love numbers, but they are for math.
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| Re: a comment on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
30-Oct-06/2:33 AM |
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You are the only thing in the world that makes me wish I wasn't English. Anything to avoid being associated with you. "O 'Neill"? What the fuck? Where in the world is there a name like that? "O'X" means "of X". Would you ever say "Three O 'Clock"? What is a 'clock? Are you releasing all your pent-up testosterone that can't be unleashed under the stern eyes of those All Poetry moderators, or do you genuinely think you're hilarious? Either way, every comment you've ever made has now been reduced to utter buncombe. -bow'ls-
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| Re: Suburban Spleen by Sasha |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
30-Oct-06/2:19 AM |
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Excellent - I've missed your villanelles. Typo line 14 - 'unconscious'. Your refrains are extremely well-worked here and keep a constant flow, which isn't easy in a vil. I also quite like the occasional extra rhyme ('on', 'pawn'). It's almost contradictory though, the bleakness contained within such a beautiful form. It seems to demand a certain eloquence of language which undermines all the boredom represented.
'With the nuisance of a ray' is the best line here.
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| Re: Fraser's Wedding by Stephen Robins |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.219 |
29-Oct-06/5:07 PM |
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Disappointing considering your track record.
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| Re: Brackish by <~> |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.219 |
29-Oct-06/5:05 PM |
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Deeply boring and pretentious. Over-punctuated and empty.
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| Re: a comment on The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.219 |
29-Oct-06/5:02 PM |
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It "kinda" makes me want to puke, "kinda", like.
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| Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.219 |
29-Oct-06/5:01 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Rare Oul' Times in the County Wicklow by Edna Sweetlove |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.236.219 |
29-Oct-06/5:01 PM |
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You appear to be fucking demented. I don't know which peasanty part of the world you dwell in. I assume the US of Shite; please do me a favour (note the spelling, dumbass) and don't read any more of my intellectual pieces. Also note that "your" is different from "you're". Jesus, where were you colonials educated? Go and watch Fox News and support your murderous troops as they slaughter Iraqi babies and cheer as they come home piecemeal in bags.
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| Re: a comment on Blue, Black & White by oneglove |
Dovina 12.72.34.186 |
29-Oct-06/3:14 PM |
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Lots of corners
Lots of rooms
Lots of strumming
Lots of tunes
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| Re: Your Eyes by Dovina |
Stephen Robins 89.241.203.90 |
29-Oct-06/10:22 AM |
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