Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Dovina 208.127.114.215	21-Mar-07/10:32 AM
My grandmother tried to make knitters and crocheters out my sister and me. She had no loom, and never wove more than tales. My sister learned; I rebelled. Ephialtes of Athens would have been appalled.
Re: a comment on Her Mitts by Nepanthe	Nepanthe 74.99.232.77	21-Mar-07/6:30 AM
It works now.
Re: Her Mitts by Nepanthe	Ranger 81.103.124.179	21-Mar-07/5:53 AM
By the way, I couldn't get the link to your music to work.
Re: Untitled by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	21-Mar-07/5:49 AM
This is a terrible haiku about an 'untitled'.
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	Ranger 81.103.124.179	21-Mar-07/5:46 AM
Sir, I am glad to see that you are able and well; we never did finish that renga.
Re: a comment on Finding Me by beaner14	Ranger 81.103.124.179	21-Mar-07/5:44 AM
Try writing haiku about images. They don't need to be spectacular metaphors or anything, just get the hang of imagery and non-cliched description for the time being. Then move on to metre, and after that, to writing 'from experience' (whatever the hell that means). When all those requisites are fulfilled, you may begin your lessons in writing about the Loom - and then, my girl, an poete you shall be!
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.106	20-Mar-07/9:05 PM
It seems we have a Weaver in our midst. Quick! Ephialtes! Sound the Nudity Alarum and make ready the Loom. It is only a matter of time now...
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Dovina 208.127.114.121	20-Mar-07/6:40 PM
It’s because my mother and grandmother both worked with knitting yarn; my father and grandfather never did. In fact, my grandmother would unravel worn-out sweaters, salvage the usable yarn, and wind it into skeins for new projects.
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Aetius 206.169.229.114	20-Mar-07/1:48 PM
I cannot express in words just how humorous I find it that you automatically apply the feminine pronoun to the poem, as if assuming that I would only consider a woman to be less bright than imagined.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.114.9	19-Mar-07/9:05 PM
Haiku is not the use of a formula like 5-7-5.
Re: Untitled by Dovina	richa 81.179.219.225	19-Mar-07/11:09 AM
Haiku is not the skill of getting bogged down in maudlin sentiment in a handful of syllables.
Re: Whispers the Pariah by Enkidu	Dovina 208.127.114.209	18-Mar-07/8:11 PM
Take the l out of suckling
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	Dovina 208.127.114.209	18-Mar-07/8:07 PM
You must be a good teacher if they react in any way at all.
Re: Stolen Moments by mango123	maggiem11001 70.226.87.75	16-Mar-07/10:02 PM
wow you really did a good job on this. i like it a lot
Re: love by mango123	richa 81.179.219.225	16-Mar-07/3:26 PM
I don't thin the line breaks work here. With couplets there is little point in using enjambment. I would just write the first three couplets as follows: Love is burning you can see it in her eyes. (or Love is burning you can see it in her eyes). Love is burning you can hear it in his sighs. (or Love is burning you can hear it in his sighs). He feels so old beside Her and wonders how can this be?
Re: a comment on Here are the wipes by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.106	16-Mar-07/9:48 AM
"pederastic shame"... the greatest of all shames, bar one: the shame of being an ethnic. Incidentally, the above is a fine example of my favourite rhyme scheme: A A A A ... until you run out of things that rhyme with A B B B B ... until you run out of things that rhyme with B C C C C ... and so on
Re: a comment on Finding Me by beaner14	beaner14 216.221.81.99	15-Mar-07/12:48 PM
thanks for the comments, im so new at this and i appreciate the feedback. any help that i can get is taken into consideration :)
Re: the wind outside by Emma	richa 81.179.219.225	15-Mar-07/12:05 PM
I can't really see a fire alarm shaking in the wind. The whole smoking and reminiscing about the clang of a door is a bit dull. There are a couple of promising ideas here. The tree that doesn't bud one spring and is removed and the lights that burn out then bringing the poem back to 'maybe the tree will get replaced'. I like that.
Re: The Greek Philosopher Poem; cutting wrists in the bathtub by cheese.doodles	richa 81.179.219.225	15-Mar-07/11:52 AM
I don't really see choking as appropriate. Close to a neat metaphor here.
Re: The Greek Philosopher Poem; cutting wrists in the bathtub by cheese.doodles	richa 81.179.219.225	15-Mar-07/11:50 AM
I cut my wrists as a philosopher. I used Occam's razor.