Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Dovina 208.127.114.102	22-Mar-07/2:08 PM
Really? I'd have expected "my father and grandfather never did" to yield this reaction.
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Dovina 208.127.114.102	22-Mar-07/2:06 PM
So how did he fare when Zionist Rebel made an attempt on The Loom of Lost Souls?
Re: a comment on Writer's Block by cheese.doodles	Ranger 81.103.124.179	22-Mar-07/1:40 PM
All poemes about goblins are fundamentally pornographic. You saw what that slag Rossetti wrote about.
Re: Oliver by Stephen Robins	Ranger 81.103.124.179	22-Mar-07/1:35 PM
This is a work of sheer beauty, I intend to print it out and plaster it above my bed so that every morning I am reminded of the wond'rousness of life.
Re: The Small Ones by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	22-Mar-07/1:33 PM
I liked the idea of the evolutionary equivalent of spiked hair and tongue studs, and the two lines about barnacles and termite queens are good. The rest sort of lost me. I am not in a very perceptive mood tonight though, so you shall have to forgive me.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	22-Mar-07/1:29 PM
I will insult someone horribly one day, just for you. And also because 'chintzing' is the very best word I have seen all week.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	22-Mar-07/1:28 PM
What bow'ls.
Re: a comment on Writer's Block by cheese.doodles	cheese.doodles 70.52.171.241	22-Mar-07/12:52 PM
What? NO! Why would you think that?
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 63.212.164.106	22-Mar-07/11:15 AM
But it is Ephialtes of Trachis who tends The Loom Of Lost Souls... as punishment for his treachery. Ephialtes of Athens is neither here nor there.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Mar-07/10:02 AM
You were so extraoridinarily close to saying something unpleasant to someone in that comment, but then you rescued yourself by chintzing it up with some " ". However, a pleasnat comment with a barb from Ranger is still the most withering attack anyone can experience on poemranker. So Dovina, get yourself a title, and then get yourself back to the open water before the Icelanders catch you and make you into heating oil.
Re: The Small Ones by Dovina	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Mar-07/9:58 AM
This poem makes light of the deeply fecund stirrings of the author whilst, almost unbelievably, illustrating the juvenile chauvinism that most men exhibit to their womenfolk. Truly, a Duchy Original hobnob perched on the side of a eunuch's head could not create more worrying signs of modern day degradation than the impassioned twittering of this middle aged proto-crone.
Re: Campfire by MacFrantic	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Mar-07/9:53 AM
Macfrantic, firstly you have a rubbish username, secondly this poem is moribund.
Re: Writer's Block by cheese.doodles	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Mar-07/9:52 AM
Is this about porn?
Re: a comment on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	22-Mar-07/8:48 AM
"She had no loom, and never wove more than tales" is the most ball tighteningly erotic imagery.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.114.14	21-Mar-07/5:38 PM
You can call it "short poem" if you want, but I like the attitude of Japanese haiku. I don't exactly try to imitate them, but I try for their mindset. Thanks for the comments.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Dental Panic 84.85.206.227	21-Mar-07/5:31 PM
so why call it haiku? 'short poem' will do fine. I find a touch of sentiment in this one: even when I'm in Kyoto when I hear the cuckoo I long for Kyoto still, it's more of an observation of a sentiment. But this is one of the best: Old pond Frog jumps in Splash! (both are by Basho)
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.114.14	21-Mar-07/5:19 PM
Sentiment, morality and metaphor are not absent from Japanese haiku. Basho, Buscon, Issa, Shiki all used them. True, the Japanese almost always used seasonal references, which English writers, sadly, have thought unnecessary. And we tend to use Western literary devices, which really don’t work well in haiku.
Re: Untitled by Dovina	Dental Panic 84.85.206.227	21-Mar-07/4:37 PM
haiku should be left to japanese. western haiku always has this slight touch of sentiment, morality or metaphor.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Ranger 81.103.124.179	21-Mar-07/12:04 PM
No, I think it is an excellent haiku. But I have 'funny views' concerning titles.
Re: a comment on Untitled by Dovina	Dovina 208.127.114.215	21-Mar-07/10:35 AM
Although most haiku are untitled, it does seem a strange title; maybe "Blank" or "_____" should fill that space. Have you, too, inverted the scale, giving nines to the terrible?