Re: Tropical afternoon by cpill	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/11:29 AM
Maybe it's because I'm a girl - but the first line just seems too repulsive to go with the rest of the write...I don't get the connection. Overall the resignation at what life brings is evident, and painted quite well...
Re: a comment on ........ by Prince of Void	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/11:23 AM
I get the void part - only too well...It must be the language that I find difficult. line two do you mean scars? mesmerizing my words - not sure on that concept...putted me into grave? I haven't feel enough? Some lines seem to twist another way, just wanted to clarify.
Re: a comment on ........ by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 80.71.126.78	16-Jun-07/11:11 AM
I'm just lost - by the empty spaces and afterwards the void is between us
Re: This road goes on forever by MacFrantic	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/11:03 AM
Sad - it all feels right except for how suicide used to be a pleasant sight...not sure what you mean by that.
Re: Between two Truths by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:58 AM
I hate to be a band-wagon jumper but I agree with the other two. I like the whole write apart from the cars/churches...they don't seem to work together.
Re: ........ by Prince of Void	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:54 AM
I'm just confused - by the language and the message.
Re: It's Simple by Enkidu	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:50 AM
Nice little play on words - the give and take of it all...
Re: Morning Maid by Enkidu	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:48 AM
Not sure why I like this, and definately know I don't get the full message. Maybe that's why...
Re: Decisions by MacFrantic	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:43 AM
flows along nicely enough to be kinda fun and yet a little bloody.
Re: Bonded by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:40 AM
wow guys - your comments are weirdly comforting. thanks :)
Re: a comment on The Lover and The Rapist by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.130.10	16-Jun-07/10:38 AM
no on both counts but yes on not a nice picture
Re: Between two Truths by Dovina	some deleted user 64.140.228.3	16-Jun-07/10:31 AM
A very good read Dovina, although I do agree with Al on L4 in the first stanza. I assume you like the alliteration of the simile as it is. Also, if you changed L4 in the second stanza to something like, "gives solice from the cross" you could escape the double use of comfort. Just some thoughts. I find the last stanza very Emily Dickinson like.
Re: Resume by drnick	Dovina 72.161.151.195	15-Jun-07/2:16 PM
The first two verses say it all. The rest gets into the nitty of how and why. But Why do that?
Re: a comment on Between two Truths by Dovina	Dovina 72.161.151.195	15-Jun-07/2:08 PM
Would "in churches colored as cars" be eccentric enough? Most Kentucky counties are "dry," where beer cannot be legally sold. You can bring it in though, and I assume that's what you mean. I find it unique that cigarettes are legal everywhere in the south including public places and the churches find that just hunky dorewy.
Re: a comment on ........ by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 80.71.124.48	15-Jun-07/10:47 AM
ETC..
Re: Dixon Country Store, Kentucky by Dovina	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	15-Jun-07/8:59 AM
The last line is killer. You could almost call it a prose poem.
Re: ........ by Prince of Void	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	15-Jun-07/8:55 AM
Etc.
Re: Between two Truths by Dovina	ALChemy 71.68.46.177	15-Jun-07/8:54 AM
I don't like the simile "the kinds of churches like colors of cars" I assume you mean because there's lots of different car colors and there's lots of different churches but it just lacks your usual eccentric wit. Also "beer’s against the law" is just not true. The rest I found interesting and well done.
Re: Bonded by Skamper	Dovina 72.161.151.195	15-Jun-07/8:35 AM
Something like the comfort in my recent one. Nice job.
Re: Talk by Skamper	pete 62.56.90.230	15-Jun-07/6:45 AM
well; i think that's nice .... somewhat lacking in something .... getting skampered out catcha later