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........ (Other) by Prince of Void In the dark sanctuary where I pray for the love
For those scars are concealed inside
Forgetting whys and hows of the destiny
I do not want to say how it could happen
I mesmerize my words
Within fettered heart in the stated delirium
Moreover, dreams entwine me from time to time
Within my mind from the ocean of your memories
I do not find that eternal happiness of a god
After thousand years of lives
No wing for this fallen angel
That he turned into a lover in the paradise lost
I said enough
The void that turned my colors into grey
I have done enough
The agony that buried me into that grave
I have shed tears enough
The beloved who can show me the love
I havenât felt enough
The love, which I was born for that
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Posted: June 14, 2007 12:38 PM PDT; Last modified: June 16, 2007 11:54 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8775 Comments:
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ALChemy @ 71.68.46.177
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15-Jun-07/8:55 AM
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Prince of Void @ 80.71.124.48
> ALChemy
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15-Jun-07/10:47 AM
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ETC..
I'm just confused - by the language and the message.
I'm just lost - by the empty spaces and afterwards the void is between us
I get the void part - only too well...It must be the language that I find difficult. line two do you mean scars? mesmerizing my words - not sure on that concept...putted me into grave? I haven't feel enough? Some lines seem to twist another way, just wanted to clarify.
well did u watch the movie called " lost highway "
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no can't say that I have - worth it?
this reads much better, there are a few things I would change but it's all personal preference. 160 view(s)
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