Dovina
replying on A Piñon Limb by Dovina
18 Oct 2004, 3:52 PM
Believe, brother. We are all nothing but pinion limbs, and only us elite pinion-limb experts have a right to talk about it. Thanks for comprising part of the city-dwelling audiance.
This is the craziest thing I've seen you write, starting with the title. (And btw, welcome back) What on earth are you trying to say with these mushy, flowery, King James words? "and all the world and love are young"? Really! And "enjoyest thee" must surely mean 'enjoy thou.' And "steepy mountain yields" means something I'm sure. "Roses and posies" is a bit lik saying 'women and people.'
Oh, yo're pulling our collective legs, aren't you? The last line is lol.
Flashbacks of fight club.
Thank you, I try.
damn, you are a handful.
Had to land some time.
I am hideously insulted that anyone should think they have to ask me not to take something the worng way. I never take anything the wrong way! The purity of my continual rightness in these matters has been worngly interpreted as blandness.
Getting back to the poem...I will have to agree that this is a little bland. But it's not an insult, just criticism, so don't take it the worng way.
you ripped this page right out of your diary didn't you
its not cute at all. please, put it all into normal context and it will be rated much higher.
Did you write this with syllables in mind? I can't make up my mind.
The first half of this really got me going...and then that kind of cop-out at the end....
Yes.
I think it's Ironic that in this poem you perfectly described... A roll of toilet paper, that's DEEP.
Now, fly the gay winged bat back to uranus.
-=0=-
Amazingly amazing like orange tang.
I mean do you really think we're interested in watching you stick your head up her twat? I'd fucking rather be gay, you're right!
And you're a mediocre pussy whipped hack and?
How utterly relevant! She obviously dreams of tramps, eulogizes them.