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A Piñon Limb (Free verse) by Dovina
Lowland piñons seldom suffer
From limbs weighed down with ice,
Free from burden added
By winterâs glistening jewels.
But trees whose seed from crapping raven,
Set their roots on higher ground,
Where winter rains paint frozen needles,
And ice beads brighten the morning sun.
I hear a crack in cold of night,
And feel a little twang
Of long low limb on bushy tree
Broken at the base.
Substantial diamonds, hard and lasting,
Adorn the morning limb,
Bejeweled in crystalline stillness
Sparkling diamonds, colors bright.
Now the colors change again
From blue to red to green to gold
A spraying fountain, intoxicating dazzle,
Spectacle to remember.
By afternoon, where once she sparkled,
A low limb tastes the dirt
From which she came and soon returns.
The ice warmed up and left.
From many summers, the break has healed.
The limb with diminished strength,
Pressed low by one nightâs weight,
Still adds a little growth.
A wild and anxious limb
For years stood the common tests,
But broke without the strength
To stand a common Love.
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Posted: July 7, 2004 9:55 AM PDT; Last modified: July 10, 2004 3:57 PM PDT
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Because of the length I feel okay picking on a line, this one :"Where winter rains paint frozen needles," needs a meter tweek I think.
But really, it doesn't hurt the thing much - well done.
(You were supposed to ask me what a porcelain henway was....)