I'm comfuzzled. The 'us' isn't clear, who are 'us'? You're structure is only the best. If I take each line individually they're lovely but what does it all mean?

eewww.

Better. Get rid of 'convey meaning', it negates everything you wrote before it. Trust me.

Nice poem. You don't need to ask that rhetorical question, it's childish and ineffective. It truly is a masterpiece Of criticism. Your painting? Your painting looks like shit...

Shin, nothing personal, puh-leeeze drop the SO. Put a comma at the end of the line and listen. The word -so- sounds like you don't care about the conversation.

I'm way off but, my mind went the filthy route first, but on a second read I thought it was about the practice of poetry. A daisy chain being ones older and of lesser quality poems. Damn. Sorry I missed the first cut too. 10 for your poem 6 for me being an idiot.

I want to like this. Especially with the caryatids. Great word ,btw. Just too piecemeal for me. Show me more about the support structures.

everything above 3 and everything below, to infinity, is total bullshit. 10

This poem seems a little odd but it's interesting. This can be compared to how fragile life is. Good work.

guitarra, no?

hauntingly resonates with my hang-over this morning.

I love the monochromatic image. Of course, people who die by mortar shell explosions, traffic accidents and serial killers with knives die more colorfully. But the aged do tend to wilt in the way you describe.

Good images. I can't say this is one of your best, but it is pretty like a painting of ballerinas by Degas.

Damned you and your spanish! I actually care whats under the line of stars, but I'm too lazy to translate it. Interestingly a paradox of its own sort.

Maybe its just me, but it reads increbible in a Will Shatner kinda way. Rather pretty, with lots of good itellectual images. Its tied together like one of those ribbons you mentioned knotted into a bow. -10-

Yes, humans are rather limited in the beauty of death. -10-

Wow, vague with a great sense of inner wisdom being displayed, but I still feel as though I missed it. I love the slothful line 'shake the low branches

god'swife-How can you give me a zero and not leave a comment?

Wow, that's so much better!

Unfortunately the 'trate' implies that you only 'tried' to have sex, and never actually succeeded. 'Que tuve sexo' would be wittier.