SupremeDreamer
on some deleted poem
22 Jun 2004, 2:49 PM
Not too bad, though it lacks some vigor and could have been shortened and worded better, it's worthy of a seven.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
22 Jun 2004, 2:49 PM
well man im jus writing wuti m feelin ya know man dont go hating on me cause u dont like it , i mean if thats wut u think obviously ur not a fan of rap r u ?
Such a thing is lost only when one believes that it is unrecoverable.
Blessed with eight.
Axle Rose rocked, before the weave and beads.
Nudered
oh zodiac, get over yourself will you
wibble
BLOBBY BLOB 9/10
BOLB BLOBBY 8/10
THIS IS A REALY GOOD POEM I CARNT BELEAVE NO ONE
HAS COMMENTED ON IT keep up the good work!!
Definitely has a haunting feel to it. Something about S3 bothers me, but I'm not sure what it is. I'll have to give it a few more reads. Here's a 9.
Yer right on!
good to see you back!
kid?
good poem!!
Who are these people? Why would using the word "nigger" give them "cred"? I'll give you a 3 because I'm intrigued, but you're going to have to explain more if you want a good vote.
Now you have something in common with niggers besides that gold-tooth and cocked cap.
Shizzle
hey yall i think that this one is by best that i have posted and i would like yalls oppinion on thank yall
this a true poem i love it and its so true and all but they can write poems good like this one is awsome
The last four stanza I love.
In the first stanza you write
The quiet hum of the words
seem to fade into
each other in ...
Yuo can't say that, 'The quiet hum...seem to...', you see you continuing the sentence as if the subject was 'words' but it's not, it's 'hum'. 'words' is the subject of the preposition.
The quiet hum of words fading
into each other.
Or something like that.
thanx i seen you liked my poem thanx alot ur sweet but holla i gotta bounce up out of this peace
PE@CE OUT
I like this (well, no crazy about the lowercase "i"'s) - for me it stays on the right side of honest introspection.