You're the most middling load of bollocks ever.

i get the picture.. good job...

dun like the title.. but the poem itself is good...

meandering. the first stanza is so difficult to understand, it makes the rest pointless. The last couplet is sort of the cherry on the cake of incomprehensiveness. How you got where exactly?

what are '...habit fingernails'? Does this mean there bitten? Or you've been injecting under them? I think if you left out that line, and just left the first two, it would be more haunting an intro. what have calendar blots to do with Mecca or skirmished hopes, your not showing enough. I like the next part and the stanza that follows. I also like your use of simile 'cynics...like needles' for example. Considering you've used over 100 words, don't you thiink the last line is out of place? Even if you don't it's flat and boring.

what's the name of the muse for poetry? Is it Caliope? No, I think she's music. Oh and stop saying 'it'. Anyway you could call it (POETRY MUSE'S NAME) Resurrected Works better if you personify poetry with either a 'he' or a 'she'.

Well done for breaking every cardinal rule which is held sacred on poemranker.

Perfect for "Seventh Day Adventist's Monthly." Not my pint of ale. Why do we capitalize the word god? It can't be a name. Isn't it an occupation? It is a little like capitalizing the word mechanic or poet. I'll stick to capitalizing only the name of god, Guinness, Jose Cuervo and the like. I know, hate the subject not the poem. -9-

go read the one i care 4 you and it is alot better than my other one srry if some of you are haters on my work but whateva i have ppl who like so idk what the haters think but yall go read my other poem "I CARE 4 YOU" and rate it plz holla imma fixin to bounce so PE@CE OUT

hey this is really good poem i think you should keep up the good work ur an awsome writer keep it up holla bac

rate meeh

Its got your usual good flow, steady hand. Not crazy about the "it" with "cannot" (toss it) or the word "Huge" - lumbering takes care of that and if not, maybe a better word would. bleeding a bit from small words, but still - fine enough.

Winnie the Pooh would be very angry with you... *9*

Not necessarily my cup of specially brewed herbs and spices, but I especially liked S2 L9 and 10 *7*

If you leave out the first verse - a cattish fantasy. With the first verse, I'm tossed from pervert to cannibal to tiger.

First verse is great. Might consider ending with it. I can definitely relate to this.

Who cares what God , the puppeteer, thinks. But then, I could be wrong.

Congratulations on know knowing that you have have moved an athiest, with words, however disinterested in the message. *9*

BLOB

Blobby!!!!!