Though this appears to be heartfelt and a thought worthy of poetry, the presentation falls short of one of the best definitions of love I've read and a touching ode to a fallen sister, both by the same poet. It's not just you; a spirit of depression seems gripping poemranker like a disease in a beehive. I feel like a prodical daughter returning to find the houses boarded up and the homefolk moping around.

Good poem. For my $.02, I didn't like this line: i will take solace in the fact that i have been in love The poem is otherwise taking-care-of-business, let's-move-on. That line felt out of place, too touchy-feely and like you're justifying past mistakes. Said another way, 'solace' is an emotion word stuck in the middle of a poem centered on logic and thought.

Yes, I read it anyway, and it's as good as most of what's come down lately.

Shit, it's unfit to boil.

Are you related to Blindpoetry?

This is good, except for telling her what to do in the last two lines.

The Mother's Curse A noise in the dark I tremble in sheer terror - An escaped son?

Too General. Spelling and grammar errors detract. A good thought like this needs focus.

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spelling and grammar would help this. still too much telling for me.

I made a word: pop-tarded. It's my nice way of saying retarded. I really liked this poem. I liked it so much, I printed it out and used it in place of my toilet paper. -0-

You might want to get a study guide to help you out with Ulysses... -9-

I don't want to see your crotch sweat, But very cutely writ. -7-

You sound like my friend who has a very bad lisp... and speaking of... why does the word lisp end in "sp?" I gave it a 3

how come "have" doesn't rhyme with the rest of it?

well... weren't you wrong!!!

Hmmmmmm... It would make more sense to me if it were "by barstools that have Gone-awry-a." They have no clout whatsoever.

Damn! All I see is a blob upon my sheetmusic! I had a playfully good time trying to put a tune to this, but alas, blobby blob, blobby blob, I lacked the syncopation. It's nice to know you're loved though.

I'm afraid I have to agree with the others - a tale with no expression... A shrink is an amazing use of money and really can help with your issues.

Afraid is a very weak impact word. You should try to avoid labelling emotions, use image to portray. Also this could do with cutting down, make the reader think over the words rather than read through to get to the punch. Spellcheck would not go amiss.