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Little Girl (Free verse) by hbhpoems
Little Girl why aren't you Outside Playing with the others Is it because you have lost Your sense of innocence Because your were touched were you Should never have been Little Girl where is the sparkle In your eyes Have the abuse took it away Left you feeling scared and afaid Without anywhere to turn Little Girl in time you will Heal and begin to laugh again Your Creativity And Faith in God is what is going to heal you.

Up the ladder: Unless
Down the ladder: Dovina & Co

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.8211956
Overall Rank: 10877
Posted: June 29, 2004 11:14 AM PDT; Last modified: June 29, 2004 11:14 AM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 64.173.77.254 | 29-Jun-04/4:01 PM | Reply
This is good, except for telling her what to do in the last two lines.
[4] nentwined @ 66.92.28.14 | 30-Jun-04/11:16 AM | Reply
spelling and grammar would help this. still too much telling for me.
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