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Little Girl (Free verse) by hbhpoems Little Girl why aren't you
Outside Playing with the others
Is it because you have lost
Your sense of innocence
Because your were touched were you
Should never have been
Little Girl where is the sparkle
In your eyes
Have the abuse took it away
Left you feeling scared and afaid
Without anywhere to turn
Little Girl in time you will
Heal and begin to laugh again
Your Creativity
And Faith in God is what is going to heal you.
Up the ladder:
my read of love
Down the ladder:
Sporadic Schizophrenia? Definately.
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Posted: June 29, 2004 11:14 AM PDT; Last modified: June 29, 2004 11:14 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10869 Comments:
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Dovina @ 64.173.77.254
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29-Jun-04/4:01 PM
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This is good, except for telling her what to do in the last two lines.
spelling and grammar would help this. still too much telling for me.
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