Stephen Robins
on some deleted poem
5 Jul 2004, 3:30 AM
Duff Guff.
You simpering half wit.
You are a slapper.
actually this is classed as a senryu, the haiku is specifically for nature related poems, same syllable count, also the syllable count on this is wrong, you have 6 in the first line, 8 in the second and 5 in the third,
traditional haiku is 5,7,5 although condensed haiku are very popular, sorry, but this is not a haiku
Glee
Agree
to my plea,
to let me,
empty,
me,
into thee.
Hmm well..This poem is so bad it makes me feel better about my poems and for that I will grant you a...-5-
I dont know who in their right mind would even consider giving THIS poem a 10..It's pure garbage..Thats all I can say..You Suck and Your Poem Sucks.. -0-
Brittanyy
on Barometric pressure & true love (The prince of storms) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
4 Jul 2004, 6:07 PM
I don't know why anyone would give this poem anything below a ten. Very good.
I liked your poem..Very uh what's the word..Touching..Good job!
Are you sure his name wasn't "Little Willie?"
a sad thing indeed.
zodiac
on Order My Book, And $4.00 Will Go To Killing A Pop Star by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Jul 2004, 9:01 PM
Basia, Seals from Seals and Crofts, or the White Stripes. My check's in the mail. Don't let me down again.
You're a lot better when you're not trying to talk science. Unfortunately, none of the sentences in this poem are really sentences.
well described.. some of the words are used too many times, though.. that kind of marred the poem
in L14, i suggest you change 'striketh my hand' to sth else as 'strike' means 'hit'...
don't really feel the words.. but the way you write is good. keep writing.
I'm not sure why you used 'he' in stanza two when all throughout you used 'i'. (?)
A very interesting piece, a style I have not seen before, are we saying what we would like for dinner? hehehehe......... very funny.............
edpeterson
on Order My Book, And $4.00 Will Go To Killing A Pop Star by <{Baba^Yaga}>
5 Jul 2004, 8:26 AM
that's it.. I'm buyin one
I like the way you use clouds as a metaphor for the human condition.
Hello. Perhaps I can shed some light on this matter. I have a degree in science from Strathclyde Univesity, and I can confirm that:
a) This poem is wrong
b) Science is true.
Ok this poem was just a bad attempt to be funny and well...It's not..Nice try champ better luck next time..