how sad

n/c 10

You distended anus

This is utter drivel

Pure brilliance. 10.

"waiting to be wished upon." Cute.

How in the hell is this a limerick?

-=Dark_Angel=- with or without P.I. embodied.

I wish my writers block was this good. 10.

I thought SARs was mainly in China, but I guess that wouldn't rhyme.

I like this quite a bit. Try a line break after "Sharon." Falling for roses and stabbed with barbs is quite nice, reqlly, and recognized.

You are absolutely hopeless. Please give up now.

Quite good, really, except for the last line, which because I'm accused of being a prude, I will say doesn't fit here.

I suppose if I did not relate to this in my own experience I would pass it off as another ramble by another crazy poet. But since I do, it's enlightening.

You're a bad-tempered old slut with a face like a bulldog's scrotum

This is good, but what are Cylindrical Errs? The last verse seems superfluous.

The juvenile innocence conveyed by the writing is definitely cute and amplifies the subject matter. The blaring spelling errors though are just a little too much to give it that Toys r' Us backwards R quality which may have made it too juvenile anyway.

An actual observation, no doubt. But it lacks and more than observation, nothing really to provoke thoutht. "there were only two bus. . . "

I'd like to see the rythm a bit smoother. I like this.

Very sad, yes. Some elaboration seems in order.