Caducus
on While waiting for someone to check in my cars by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2007, 1:34 AM
Sweet. The seperation of adult responsibility and childhood innocence all linked by flesh until the teddy is subtle yet leaves me wanting those good ole 'stand by me' river phoenix days back.
too many words
either a 8 or a 1 ....dunno .... say 5 .... involving, though ... make that 6
.... er ... perp or victim ? ( or do you consider yourself both ?) ... nul points ... for the poem alone, that is
juvenile ... still, can't knock you for your years
scary as fuck and somewhat sexy ... or am i reading too much there? .... more tea .... genius
cop-out saying it's for someone else .... good story tho
don't he though
shows promise
too many words
re-write once the devil has gone and note the difference
dunno why but i like this ... poetry,though... not so sure
cute
quite agree ... i'll give myself one too ... for the structure
Too the people who gave me 0s, would you explain to me why you gave me 0s except for Rockmage because I honestly do not care what you think since you just go around giving everyone 0s!
Wow - you're still producing this bile!
I love the imadry created in this one....very touching
a sigh and a tear...very heartfelt. Keep writing love
not comment worthy....