what a coincidence! she is my soul too!

Nice one.

i like this one, it flows nicely.

dont capitalize it pls.

i really like this one, nice job.

smut

Let me be the first among us to say, "Thanks, Crystal Lane Swift's Mom."

It's a good thought,Really good. But I think you should think it through further. Expand, expound, eh?

I especially like the comparison,unclear roads...

No

Does she know you are comparing her to spiders and ants? 16 huh?

My parents raised me the same way, Only hipocracy from my mother now tho'. It's funny you should say treat your neighbor as yourself, I'm thinking of naming my business D.U.O. Services. Do Unto Others.

Great, If there is one thing that jumped out at me,it would be s.4 l2, Delete "it". She... Must have seen you weep Deep behind hind the willow tree Where you watched her toss her hair And it made you wish she cared

If this is what you want do say, that's o.k, But re-write, again and again. Where to begin? In the first stanza, using dread, and then beating it 'till it's dead, No. Buy a Thesourus, find a chorus, and next time... try not to bore us. But KEEP WRITING.

I would leave the same comment that someone left on my poem 'To My Love'... This probably doesn't mean much except to you and the person you wrote it for. Except, I know, It means so much more, Or at least I thought so at the time. Thanx ED.

The shadow of THIS mortal CONSTANTLY questions my fate, But it's all about morals anyway! Right? A few miscpewings. elliminate the dash between mime artist. Other than that???

This is a fabulous pot roast. The best.

quick, take the ice out of the refrigerator! It is leaking all over the weenies!

This is no sonnet, but instead; A well pinched loaf of bread.

A fistfull of fuck.