horus8
on War Story by dougsoderstrom
6 Jan 2005, 1:33 PM
Good God man, will you please learn how to fucking write?
Right... you give way too many idiots way too much promise. What we need, are more tsunamis.
Should start every line with 'tis'
And just put this poem entirely out
of it's misery instead of dicking around.
Jesus fucking christ.
Why weren't you in Asia instead
of the dingy supermodel
we need more stories like
This! 11!
Not only is the maths in this poem facile beyond belief, principally because you wouldn't know decent maths if it bit you on the arse, but the poem itself it terrible. Doesn't scan, has no rhythm, in fact, apart from being arranged into four, for want of a better word, stanzas, could just be some guffy text. Give us a break with the maths poems.
hey miss dictionary not to bad.....not to bad....o and sorry 4 all the spelling mistakes
this is so well written and leaves much room for thought
-megan
very nice
-mega
hey miss dictionary not to bad.....not to bad....o and sorry 4 all the spelling mistakes
Bravo motherfucker, bravo. The fine cuisine shall be a welcome dish for the pilgrims who journey to the holy city of Ataraxis.
Very good weaved couplets. This type of poem is not exactly my cup of tea, but you pay attention to construction, which is always worthwile. *7*
Apathy:
Lack of interest or concern, especially regarding matters of general importance or appeal; indifference.
Still a good poem, regardless. I still can't believe I took time to inspect your faulty contradiction by way of thesaurus. *8*
P.S.
Indifference:
apathy demonstrated by an absence of emotional reactions
P.P.S. I am a f**king loser.
I hate maths but that is a cool poem all the same!! Presently we are doing integration and diferential equations in school and I go to sleep everytime the teacher enters!!
A 9!
Very nice poem.
Doug
A fine comparison if you can know about afterlife (stars). The clockwork nature of sunsets (death) seems and the certainty of night seems stretched. Still a good poem.
nicely written
You generated alot of interest in this one, D - nice work.
reminds me of meatball I once knew.
unless someone does this first
http://tinyurl.com/4htkb
- then it's the last thing you see...
I really like the concept of this poem