"dread upon the dalliers" - nice I like this one, MF.

I have to read this several times to resalize the sequence of events. Would prefer to know a glass of wine is falling in the first verse. A riddle it is. Speaking from the glass's pov is quite nice however.

Do you mean "Tucked into an ice sculpture"? mollusk? chiseled?

Anything with suicide in it deserves a zero, but because of Verse 4 and the first half of Verse 6, you get a 7.

Aparently it was worth all of this and all of another what?--fifty more years. Who knows what erotic pleasure lies in a sixty-year-old's bed?

Yes, funny. Mascara goes on eyelashes and eyebrows, not on skin.

Hi t7 - a pretty thing, but a couple spellings: "Sterling", "Sapphires" and "threw" should be "through" and I don't know if you meant "painful" or did the painflu on purpose. "in to" should prolly be "into"

3 spaces between comma and the "I'll" in the 3rd stanza I guess it works as a "prose poem" - but why? This could be said in far fewer words and cleaner as a less verbose (or nounose) poem.

thats not even yours

to much like a story

what the fuck?

you can do it! do something else, now.

Work on your spelling and put line breaks in te right places and this isn't half bad.

simple but pretty.

But you'll never say those things because you're a woman.

thank you me and a friend thought of it while thinking of our boy friends

"The flower’s been washed clean." specify flower - fix meter. "The ghosts are coming through" - weak description - fixable.

purity often wins.

monogamy even (what an ass)

A sad wait indeed. For what? Seems like it needs to say what she's waiting for.