some deleted user
on Never Said Thank You by unouluvme
28 Jan 2005, 7:06 PM
Good poem.
Sorry- hit a 6 by accident--I give you a ten!
Wow, this is top notch, better than anything you've written in a while.
the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
I've never understood the whole Devil worship thing. If you believe in that whole fairy tale about God and the Devil, why would you choose to worship the one thats going to make you suffer forever...must be a masochist. Anyway, some of the lines aren't bad, the subject notwithstanding.
Nice, as usual, but not your best, I think.
Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.
Spelling and grammar. Need to fix deez things, yo.
This should be under acrostic. No offense, but I'm not lovin' this one...
This one I likes.
Not lovin' this one as much. Not too bad, but doesn't really stand out.
Makes me a little horny, but that's about it. I'd like to see some other topic by you...most anything would do.
ummmm, ok. Well, you've got this..."Death isn't frightening but dying is." Thats not too bad...I think maybe you should try to work on your stuff a little...maybe not just try to get something posted immediately when you CAN. I'm guilty of the same thing but I've tried to curb that and actually think things out before I post them...anyway, just some unsolicited advice.
Regarding this poem: Please see my comment on your previous post and the comment on CLS's previous post.
Please see my comment on your previous post and on Lydia Evelyn's post. This is better than the last, though.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 7:02 PM
WOW Sliver--and you still get better ratings then I do...and i try, not too hard ( then my bubble doesn't burst) You are truly a poet. Maybe someday I will be as good as you.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 7:04 PM
I seriously thought it was my computer screen, or the page didn't load right, but no, it was a poem that my poet cousin wrote!
"I will brake in to a million little pieces."
LOLTTM!
Too fragile . . . to move on. Yes!
See, that wasn't that hard now was it?