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on The Narrow Way by Jeremi B. Handrinos
25 Mar 2005, 10:17 PM
LOL
enrapt isn't a verb.
Rolls on floor laughing, opps.... Pissed pants, but still laughing out loud. Good stuff. -10-
Funny. Nice ending.
Limericks are so hard to use as a means of saying anything besides funny-ha-ha, I'm surprised you haven't tried something else by now.
"nailed" should be "nailt"
"spilt" should be "split"
So I bearded him once (feeling larkey)
With a rich Putinesque Oligarchy.
But the crowd wasn't wooed;
I was fined for two lewds
And one Conduct Unbecoming a Darkey.
The best part is "pail moonlight".
Really? I was under the impression only Americans carry backpacks anymore.
Integrate! Yes.
Yo dad you gittin crunked up now?
You go playa lots of luv.
Q1: Would you ever consider writing a poem about an actual experience of yours?
Q2: Would you ever consider having an actual experience?
You were probably like negative two years old when the song "The Crying Game" was popular.
that poem is now labeled...retarded
This is a good story right up to last few lines where I think you blew it. I saw the point without your telling it at the end.
touchingly ten
::gasp::
in the best possible way. some of this has been done before, and bits done better, and some of the phrase could use tweaking. as a whole, it's damn near perfect and that's my opinion.
i liked it very much. hon,you have to have a thick skin to let other people read your stuff :-)