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The Hold Up (Free verse) by luzrheroguy
One shot fired, Toward the ceiling They said "this is a hold up, So everyone to the floor" And he thought to himself I don't do this anymore But knee jerk reactions die hard Mask now across his face Trusty yellow lighter in his left hand And can of hair spray in his right A quick burst to the nearest hands The gun echos across the floor Hands burnt and empty, swings To a catch, drag, shoulder to the ribs Flip, Smack, Unconscious A nearby brick, hurtled next To the second soon to be smoking barrel Deadly messenger caught mid-air, and a thud Weapon and rock hitting ground Sharper minded, we have a runner He makes it three feet from the door Before he hears the confident words, "Stop, or I shoot" Defeated by a his own sword, Hands raise into air

Up the ladder: Emotion Expression
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Arithmetic Mean: 8.333333
Weighted score: 6.6666665
Overall Rank: 543
Posted: March 25, 2005 12:38 PM PST; Last modified: March 25, 2005 12:38 PM PST
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[9] Dovina @ 12.72.33.77 | 25-Mar-05/2:25 PM | Reply
Funny. Nice ending.
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