Re: Within A World by forestchild7	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:04 AM
"as if it wil all my problems mend" ---- if you can't make your rhyming sound at all natural perhaps you should not try rhyming - this sounds incredibly forced
Re: You Were There by danevie	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:14 AM
you have the disconcerting habit of having someone remedy your ills in the past tense while you are still in the present-----
Re: Kansas City by PodPoet	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:26 AM
excellent
Re: The Masonic Underling & the 33 degree by horus8	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:44 AM
again,this is senryu not haiku
Re: Rustling Wind by laura2224rn	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:53 AM
i'm sorry but there is no answer to all the worldy grief's - that is one question that has puzzled philosophers for centuries
Re: Before Existence by Jsylum	dancin_n_da_moonlite 152.163.100.135	9-Apr-05/9:57 AM
i love some of the imagery
Re: science by whispern_smoke_wisp	Dovina 12.72.10.244	9-Apr-05/10:37 AM
Science has explained away none of the magic of love between dog and human. The study of evolution only enhances the magic.
Re: Kansas City by PodPoet	Dovina 12.72.10.244	9-Apr-05/10:39 AM
Well stated, though I disagree with your conclusion.
Re: shaving by crooked_smile	Dovina 12.72.10.244	9-Apr-05/10:43 AM
Then it's not perfection, is it?
Re: a journey by the_poetess	Dovina 12.72.10.244	9-Apr-05/10:49 AM
The first five lines are good, but then it wanders in bad grammar: (you lips are chapped) and (milk for you drink) The last line is only vaguely supported.
Re: a note on content by not_a_philosopher	Dovina 12.72.10.244	9-Apr-05/10:51 AM
please, at least make it clear what you are getting at, so that if your only goal is to sound nice, people will know it.
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	some deleted user 24.224.192.56	9-Apr-05/8:21 PM
A startling shake of the blubber.
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.35	9-Apr-05/10:18 PM
This is among the top, oh, five most disastrous things you've ever written. Some questions: 1) What "freedom", "authority" and "power"? Oh, you mean the Black President. Or maybe you mean for the oppressed in your poem to be Middle-aged white women, and the oppressed group men who would be secretaries but (until recently) were denied the opportunity. 2) Are you being ironic? 3) Do you know? 4) If you are, do you really mean the exact opposite (like ironists tend to do)? 5) Have you ever read Margaret Atwood's short story "Rape Fantasies"? You should. 6) Do you think you can still be friends with al-naafiiysh, blacksoul, and jroday after this? 7) No vote.
Re: a note on content by not_a_philosopher	zodiac 212.118.19.35	9-Apr-05/10:47 PM
You don't have more than a middle-schooler's familiarity with poetry, do you?
Re: science by whispern_smoke_wisp	zodiac 212.118.19.35	9-Apr-05/10:51 PM
You're wrong. Dogs do love humans. They've evolved to love humans. They evolved that way because the pack-behavior and imprinting that help them find food and fend off predators in the wild reacts well to a different-species dominant male (i.e., a human owner). Jared Diamond writes extensively on the topic in Guns, Germs, and Steel, before going on to discuss how zebras, though pack-oriented, have never been successfully domesticated. Nor even very well tamed, except by the eccentric Walter Rothschild, 2nd Baron Rothschild, who once rode a zebra-driven cart into Buckingham Palace (http://www.nhm.ac.uk/museum/tring/history/history.html) PS-I propose you think dogs don't really love humans because they have reasons for loving us, while you expect love to be somehow, I don't know, unconditional and profitless for the lover. That's just crazy.
Re: MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears	zodiac 212.118.19.35	9-Apr-05/10:56 PM
You can't be amidst a mind. You can be amidst minds, or amidst the wrinkly lobes of a brain. PS-congratulations on staging the return of napkins to poemranker. It's been a while. -10-
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.30	10-Apr-05/2:16 AM
D. I enjoyed reading your poem. I was reading some of your comments, and the way I feel is people need to be open minded about the past if they think that this poem will break up our friendship. Then they don't know me very well-10-
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	blacksoul 204.215.33.30	10-Apr-05/3:01 AM
D. as for as your poem reads why should I do you like that? When my ancestors would'nt do you like that? Some of the comments that were made to you. Some people don't understand that all black people don't feel the same about the past.Our father jroday taught us to look at the past in a positive way, and what I mean by that is look at what our ancestors had to go through so we could have the future that we have today. and don't go out there in the world acting like the world owe you something because you're black. -10-
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.30	10-Apr-05/3:05 AM
Almost forgot to tell you. The old man is very ill.
Re: Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8	cpill 81.179.107.176	10-Apr-05/11:37 AM
Fuck yeah!