Re: The Lion and the worm. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
27-Jun-08/7:28 PM |
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strange. yes, strange.
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Re: Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
27-Jun-08/7:29 PM |
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Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined |
Dan garcia-Black 69.237.237.147 |
30-Jun-08/8:31 AM |
Even better on the 2nd read.
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Re: ode to boa:w/thanks to the 60's rock group, BloodRock by malpaso |
Kamikaze 75.20.182.48 |
30-Jun-08/3:17 PM |
A dirge for modern life. This guy is nuts. I actually remember the song he's riffing on.
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Re: Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze |
daggatolar 41.219.199.160 |
1-Jul-08/5:30 PM |
good old rhyme 4 something child-like and curried with adult-chill
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Re: Falling Away by Holy Sinner |
daggatolar 41.219.199.160 |
1-Jul-08/5:37 PM |
simply break thru the wall and walk away into freedom, only that love can not be found outside of the flesh...and all we are not is not us to blame
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Re: FOR YOU!! by kristie24 |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:33 AM |
definitely one for the pimple archives. rhymes/spelling/content ... hurt ...
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Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:35 AM |
hilarious, but doesn't really do it for me as a poem. goes on a bit much, and while you get kudos on "lugubriously", ... eh. thanks for the cheer anyway :)
I know you weren't going for "quality", but there's room for art in it anyway. Though one man's art is another's bed wetting, sure...
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Re: There can be only one by Shardik |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:36 AM |
definitely has something (situational plot). If you could inject a little more context and a little less highlander...
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Re: We can all be free with our legs by daggatolar |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:37 AM |
strange. but I still don't know if I want you to go around with your legs open. what happened to good old crawling around with nothing but your arms as motive force?
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Re: The United Face of Totally Grody by Shardik |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:38 AM |
ow. I couldn't read it. great job of "what the hell".
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Re: Purple Reign of Blood by Kamikaze |
nentwined 98.148.150.246 |
2-Jul-08/2:40 AM |
definitely something many folks have envisioned with glee. the rhymes are blatantly forced (with pseudo-poetic grammatical restructuring and all that goodness) ... good for a quick chuckle?
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Re: in this bus terminal of the future by nentwined |
Skamper 123.208.6.33 |
6-Jul-08/4:44 AM |
I like that..change without true progress...
the word inevitable jars a little with me, not sure why
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Re: A rock by nisim2 |
Skamper 123.208.114.162 |
6-Jul-08/4:47 AM |
quite riddling - I want to find the trick inside the writing and answer it.
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Re: sperladnik: the sequel by malpaso |
Skamper 123.208.66.98 |
6-Jul-08/4:50 AM |
made me giggle a little awkwardly, not quite getting the hang of it ;)
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Re: for sue (20030815) by nentwined |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
9-Jul-08/7:47 AM |
ha! thanks for the smile, k
:)
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Re: Back to the boy in Cornelius Street by Caducus |
SupremeDreamer 68.123.141.188 |
9-Jul-08/10:08 PM |
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Re: Childhood Memories by Jessina |
SupremeDreamer 68.123.141.188 |
9-Jul-08/10:13 PM |
Last lines:
How poignant this would be
if it didn't remind us of hallmark cards and
the sweet nothings; words combined that sound good--
and say nothing. Your poem plays hide and seek.
Hidden is the expression, while the reader seeks
the point of the poem.
How poignant this would be:
If you hadn't tried so hard to be poignant
and miserably failed.
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No Vote. Though, in all honesty? This should get a zero.
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Re: I know what I meant by Skamper |
SupremeDreamer 68.123.141.188 |
9-Jul-08/10:15 PM |
Hrmm. I'll refrain from asking the awkward questions this poem brings to my mind.
Blessed with a seven.
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Re: God the mother by Dental Panic |
SupremeDreamer 68.123.141.188 |
9-Jul-08/10:20 PM |
The ashes are the heart of all spiritual vitamins. Though this piece has a somewhat befuddled nature? So is the mind of most minds. I likes it. The ending could be made into a seperate and more impactive poem in it's own right.
Blessed with an eight.
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