Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
on some deleted poem
8 Jun 2005, 2:56 PM
skullmaggots?
what's up with the voting/rank system on this site...my votes disappeared
A-B-A-B
what about meter?
I'm not good enough to rhyme or use meter. [shrug]
a bit pretentious
To be overly technical:
Three chambered kabooms? Harleys have two cylinders unless the sound is the 3 syllabled Po-ta-to sound . Yes, the approach is confusing. Maybe you don't need one. I'm just haranguessing you. I should talk, I ride a 95 Nighthawk which makes no such audible safety noises.
I absolutely didnt know about the 'Faith' poem in the Bible until numerous poeple bagan to discuss about this so called "plagiarized quote". And I'm not bluffing. This quote, or verse, derived from my father. When I was small, he used to always remind me of this verse. And tells me that the three most important qualities of a human are faith, confidence, and honesty. Also at that point all of the family members, including me, were atheists. We had no clue that this quote may be from some other text. As for where my father got this quote, he never told me. If this clarifies some of the disagreements and wonders, it's my pleasure to explain to the readers. Hopefuly this'll clear things up. Thanks.
PS(If you still think that I plagiarized this verse from the bible, and the whole story is just an excuse, I have nothing to say. Go ahead and believe what you think. I've shared the whole story related to this verse and if this didnt help, sorry.)
Hopefully this poem wont cause another "discussion" again. Anyways, I dont really think the title is suitable for the poem so I need some ideas. Thanks~
Perhaps consider 'Peace And War'? And what kind of "discussion" are you talking about? By the way, this is like another one of your successful masterpieces. Nice.
Hi. Just curious, where did you get the lyrics from? What song? I find the lyrics touching. Somehow. <7>
WOW. THis song is lovely. <8>
loved it...<9>
It works better if you do away with the puncts
Hip.
Might work behind the microphone, but for a simple reading it's too long.
All those long lines, there's no poetry in them. They also tell me what I've been knowing for thousands of years.
Make your big sister stop stroking your ego with Tens, she's not helping you.
What I quite like in this Town Hall Registration Data list is the melancholic >>I am from<< repetition.
How 'bout "This is an egg. This is an egg on crack. Any questions."
I'm not sure "likely" in verse 2 is necessary. I like the change in tone in the last verse.