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Life (Free verse) by sacred_poet_me
Life So mysterious And unknowing what’s going to happen Full of magnificent times Like finding a pot of gold at the end of a colourful rainbow Red, to tell me that danger is ahead Orange, to tell me the fun has just begun Yellow, to tell me that there is always a light at the end of a dark tunnel Green, to tell me that nature is one of the most wondrous things in life Blue, to tell me that I might feel sad sometimes, but family and friends will always help me up And indigo and violet, just to tell me those beautiful colours are everywhere Life Times of hurtfulness Like a thousand I can do about it Life The wonderful memories on Earth A moment where time and space doesn’t matter An instant where only I can learn to survive in Life Just like a rose Petals to remind me of the beautiful things in life And the thorns To warn me of the danger that surrounds everyone The many colours of roses Red, pink, white and many more Express the wonderful lively opportunities around Life is so fragile One minute I’m here, And the next, I’m gone Into another dimension of darkness

Up the ladder: education
Down the ladder: Women

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.0238404
Overall Rank: 7442
Posted: June 7, 2005 8:46 PM PDT; Last modified: June 7, 2005 8:46 PM PDT
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[4] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 | 8-Jun-05/6:16 AM | Reply
All those long lines, there's no poetry in them. They also tell me what I've been knowing for thousands of years.
[n/a] sacred_poet_me @ 70.68.76.244 > deleted user | 8-Jun-05/7:00 PM | Reply
Ahhh...ic. Good for you. I would be surprised if you didnt know that! Then 'someone' is really stupid and clueless! Thanks for da comment.
[9] lil_evil_boi @ 70.68.76.244 | 8-Jun-05/6:45 PM | Reply
Sentimentally touching. It really taught me what life truly means. The words flowed smoothly, and the repetition of the word 'life' really enhanced the poem. My favourite part is when how s_p_m described the reminders by using the spectrum. It sounded really nicely. Also the ending was spectacular. “One minute I’m here, and the next I’m gone. Into another dimension of darkness.”He really portrayed death in an impressive and dramatic way. Nice wordplay.
[n/a] sacred_poet_me @ 70.68.76.244 > lil_evil_boi | 8-Jun-05/6:55 PM | Reply
Thank you.
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