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Treasure What? (Free verse) by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
I've got a motivating pain in my chest it moves from far away to now and back again Like ripples in a pool crash against the edge and rebound to the center causing a shimmer that doesn't even look like a pattern after a while. I've got a substantiating enigmatic proposition in my mind rattling from synapse to cortex to oblongata In a hailstorm of information crossing paths with involuntary muscular commands... I choke. I laugh... my mind rejects the hypothesis. I continue to remember. remember. you. My mind demands a sacrifice I choke. I laugh out loud to the sky. Particles of days past break free and flow Lazily through the database of yesterday and tomorrow as I sit in the middle of a pile of pillows fluffed with overspent emotional trial and expensive advice given freely I smile contentedly. drunk on my past. remembering continuously. continuously. us. we. it.

Up the ladder: queen of the valley
Down the ladder: black boat blues

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9245
Posted: June 8, 2005 1:15 AM PDT; Last modified: June 8, 2005 1:15 AM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 | 8-Jun-05/6:09 AM | Reply
It works better if you do away with the puncts
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