horus8
on some deleted poem
17 Sep 2005, 8:56 AM
That was lukewarm tapwater of the finer variety.
You consistently redefine novice. -=o=- Therefore you get the seedless plum.
Forked the toaster
Swallowed the medicine cabinet
Shat in hat.
lol, mullosks...
odd
I agree with Dan. "Nothing makes the night so lonely"
seems rather awkward. Perhaps, "Nothing mkes the dream alive" Just a thought and a ten by my reckoning.
I can relate. Short but oh so true.
What type of poem is this suppose to be?
I'm not really getting it. Nor am I really liking it.
I think this is rather good!
I like this one regardless of your other comments you have recieved. Don't listen to all the negative remarks take anything constructive that they might add and leave the rest of the bull shit behind. Otherwise you will get to the point that you never will want to pick up the pencil again.
A good narrative poem that tells a story. Tennessee is
a beautiful state and probably more laid back than most. This is indicated by your poem.
I didn't know you felt that way about me, but thanks. Hah!
:)
Bought your book! Went to freakin St Joseph MO to get it too. It was worth it to take the time to read instead of rushing through. My new fave? Wigging out!
Love it when justice gets served up hot from mattress dancing! I laughed so hard I had to put the book down.
When's the next one due?
How the fuck do you expect me to get to LA by 7:45? I'll give you a 10 for originality.
Is this a joke? If it is, than it's pretty damn funny; if it's not... it's still pretty damn funny.
You know, you can't just paste a bunch of cliches together and call it a poem. This should constitute as plagiarism. I'll give you a "1" because you spelled everything right.
liked it. maybe someday i'll visit as well, heck, maybe even move there -8-