Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8	tianyi 86.130.65.59	15-Sep-05/4:47 PM
yes
Re: Seekers by Dovina	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:19 AM
Is the church both siding and stucco? How hideous. I suppose you'll say, religion usually is.
Re: Creation by Quarton	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:33 AM
You again. Do you consider the Big Bang and creation of Earth to be part of the process of evolution, or did the poem just kind of spaz out at that point?
Re: oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/2:35 AM
Great. And you've been reading Cannery Row, too. Extra points.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/3:09 AM
The best poem about compulsive masturbation I've read in a while. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/3:10 AM
God, you're spineless. I suppose you think you're heroic for that?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 213.186.179.179	16-Sep-05/3:12 AM
At a guess, an adolescent martyr complex. Seriously. Don't worry, you'll grow up before you do yourself any real harm. If it's taking you a little longer than other people, that's just because you're a precious flower and require extra special packing.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:18 AM
Ironically nature is usually the inspiration for building designs. Besides if man is part of nature shouldn't manmade objects be. Aren't beaver damns part of nature. I think mankind tries to make itself more special than it is.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:26 AM
Either: I promptly shoot myself in a foot. or I'm promptly shooting myself in a foot. Only one line in the whole poem does not contain the word I or My. People hate that.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:31 AM
Ahh, I see you've joined the Church of Bethy.
Re: oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:41 AM
I like everything except all the "Ohs". Makes you sound like Dorothy in Oz.
Re: Leaving Song by wilco	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:47 AM
PS: Oh and God? Could you make my penis grow another inch?... Thanks God. Hey there ladies.
Re: Creation by Quarton	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/7:55 AM
If Spock wrote poetry. Get Kirk to spice it up a little.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	16-Sep-05/8:11 AM
Some meter trouble in the first two stanzas. It's getting there.
Re: The Death of an Octopus by tianyi	ay deee 204.90.50.252	16-Sep-05/9:34 AM
truly great sentiment
Re: Unbroken Horses by Caducus	tianyi 86.130.65.59	16-Sep-05/9:57 AM
I liked when she died face down on fresh linen. 'Beauty' was shot in the hind leg tried to stand three times but fell. But all in all not enough insight or images that will stick in my mind. It reads like hopelessly melancholic list of how crap things are. "Grandma's dead, I'm a bastard, Grandpa shot my horse, Grandpa's dead" Perhaps just focus on one of these.
Re: loud clubbin by ay deee	tianyi 86.130.65.59	16-Sep-05/10:33 AM
The relationship between thick cut rug and invisible trousers is intriguing. Do you wear the rug like a large conical skirt? I enjoyed this.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.147.145	16-Sep-05/11:54 AM
It is unseemly for a woman to indulge so frequently as you in creative writing. Creativity is, overwhelmingly, a masculine trait, and your having the presumption to trespass so freely on its buttocks does you little credit. Notwithstanding a few notable exceptions, among whose company I'd have no hesitation in including Miss Jane Austen, a woman's brain can only be described as "unbelievably appalling." Ill-suited to poetry, ill-suited to academia, and ill-suited to discussing Important Matters Of The Towne. Devote yourself to embroidery, the recital of sweet music, and kittens. Thereafter, you shall find yourself much the happier, and far more likely to secure a sound marriage.
Re: Insanity by Lifeboatman	Crakyamuni 63.225.80.158	16-Sep-05/10:43 PM
Yu hit it on the head
Re: The Death of Many Octopi by tianyi	Crakyamuni 63.225.80.158	16-Sep-05/10:45 PM
Viceral. Not more much to say. ARt. subje-C---tiv--v.