This poem was extremely beautiful. I love the theme of her tears with the sea and storms. The only small suggestion I might make is to remove the word "darling", I think it takes a little away from the beauty of the rest of the poem.

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Good one you god damn mercenary.

You always grab my attention 2nd stanza opening 4 is very good. The ending seems laclustre but then i am over dramatic.

As the poetandknowit proclaimed ex pimple going straight poet i am sad to see no rhyme. The poems not bad though bar the opening line.

Then holy trinity can thus be explained, As a squeeze, a wipe and flush, And like Jesu on the cross we are pained, To break it in half with a brush. Can I ask a question, why are Chriatians so selective in their reading of the 0ld Testament? Why do they like Noah but ignore chopping off their foreskins? Is 'cos Jesus taught us that that was all outdated tosh?

Looks like a bar code.

You are sad, deluded anorexic. Thanks!

I would like to hear it read

Absolutely stunning poetry! Picked up steam and ended perfectly. No need to be sung. *10* *10* *10*

nice poem, bit too much rhyming for my (personal) linking, but it was to the point and quickly got a very nice image across to me.

What bad luck to survive a horrific plane crash only to be chased down, killed and devoured by vicious bunny rabbits. Funny stuff.

very cool

I like it

too much wisdom for his age...mmmhhmmmm....it's like they're just popping out knowing everything these days. I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.

I'd lose everything after rich red thread and maybe everything after hairy shirt.

I can't say I entirely get whats going on here, but it has me intrigued enough to read it when I'm dully awake.

this just doesnt make much sense....

I felt sympathetic to you for having the worst rated poem, since you used nice words and descriptions, they perhaps took over from giving a clear image, but still nothing to warrent the rating I am going to give you after reading that last line, I mean its murder, butchery of an otherwise borderline piece, you fiend.

Dear Wilco, In a hotmail message, someone might have suggested a Memphis drink. If so, she was adding a friendly reminder that poetry is good as basis for talk and cross check of notions like these, which I might add are pretty good.